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DragonJ1080
04/17/09, 02:51 AM
(probably the only poetry i'll ever post here)




A turbid beryl veil obscures the night
A sheet of frost, already palely lit.
The stars are dark; the air blows coldly
Through your hair, so sweetly sweeping it aswirl.
The silence whispers secrets in the snow,
While northern lights maintain their vivid flare.
Your eyes, the hazel, flawless, blaze of lights,
Like glass, reflect their boundless, burning glow.
Stygian shadows swallow sunken stones,
Their boundaries faintly outlined by the night.
The silhouettes entwine on banks of ice,
As we gaze up above on lines of fire.
Though in the dark, I hear you smile.
The heavens burn for only you tonight.
The flakes of white surround us where we lay,
As we look on, the sky above goes down in flames

thespearkid
04/19/09, 09:39 AM
Hm. You've definitely got some interesting vocabulary here, although admittedly, I didn't understand a lot of the phrases you used. Upon googling "beryl veil", the only results I found were this thread and what seems to be a PDF of this poem. Other than that, this is a very descriptive poem but there really isn't anything that interests me about the scene you're describing, lots of flowery language but no real substance I can find.