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Vedanta
04/27/09, 01:55 PM
Through the indecisive
branches
went a girl
who was life.

Through the indecisive
branches.

She reflected daylight,
with a tiny mirror,
which was the splendour,
of her unclouded forehead.

Through the indecisive
branches.

In the dark of night,
lost, she wandered,
weeping the dew,
of this imprisoned time.

Through the indecisive
branches.

Vedanta
04/27/09, 05:59 PM
Please comment/critique this poem.

Vedanta
04/27/09, 10:16 PM
I'd really like some input on this one. Thanks=)

The Personist
04/27/09, 10:18 PM
Your pushiness does not make me eager to read it. I will when I get a chance.

Vedanta
04/27/09, 10:58 PM
Alright. =)