Lies & Ties

[Kalvsylta]

A song I wrote about love.
The "first part" of the song is about how one is trying to repair a relationship.
In the "second part" the song is about how one is trying to let go, find a new way in one's life.
It's called Lies & Ties.

Sweep a tear from your eye.
You cry through a night,
feeding the ghosts,
the ghosts cheating your mind.
I'll swim through your heart,
holding it - warming it.
I'll whisper a song for your ears,
(Your ears, your ears).
I'll find you an oak in this rain,
where you can hide.
Where you can sit and listen,
listen to the voices die.
A place where I will love you forever.

Oh, the flowers do not seem to grow.
Oh, the flowers do not seem to grow.

Sweep a tear from your eye.
Scream a year, through my mind.
Watching your hair, watching your eyes.
You'll haunt my mind for another day,
for me to drown in.
Bottled up in this sea,
this sea of dreams,
waiting for a destination or
another red reciever.
Sweep a tear from your eye,
another lie, another knot to tie.
Oh, the flowers do not seem to grow,
anywhere here, anywhere near me.
Let these thoughts drain out.

[Deadbolt01]

That's cool, I like how you write. I prefer the second part I have to say. The only thing I would add is that maybe you could slip in a longer line with all those short ones, add a bit more texture to it you know? But that's just a personal preference.

[Sventhegreat]

Can't anyone write cheerful songs anymore? :(

[Kalvsylta]

That's cool, I like how you write. I prefer the second part I have to say. The only thing I would add is that maybe you could slip in a longer line with all those short ones, add a bit more texture to it you know? But that's just a personal preference.

Thank you so much! :)
Yes, now when you say so; adding a bit more text here and there would not hurt.

[Deadbolt01]

Thank you so much! :)
Yes, now when you say so; adding a bit more text here and there would not hurt.
I mean I'd have to hear the actual song to know if that would indeed help, but I think it would at least read better like that.

[fishingthe_sky]

This is alright. Some areas are cliched, but this doesn't swim in it. Nice play of ghosts/haunt between the two verses.