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lfdfforever
01/08/06, 06:11 PM
feilds of unspoken words haverst in your throat
we're burning up on 4th street, you wrote moments
off, the lights acsend every minute is in motion
life is a dotted line and death is the folding paper

secrets are told between the sheets
i always looked for the stars only to get
straving city lights, a funeral follows to
a death bed the preacher speaks but
nothing honest is said

"life is like a dark hallway filled with locked doors, we lose are way but someone somewhere shines a light and slips us a key"

R.I.P-Aaron John Payne

de la sympathie
01/08/06, 06:35 PM
I'm gonna fix this.

fields of unspoken words harvest in your throat
we're burning up on 4th street, you wrote moments
off, the lights ascend every minute is in motion
life is a dotted line and death is the folding paper

secrets are told between the sheets
i always looked for the stars only to get
starving city lights, a funeral follows to
a death bed the preacher speaks but
nothing honest is said

"Life is like a dark hallway filled with locked doors. We lose our way, but someone, somewhere, shines a light and slips us a key."

R.I.P-Aaron John Payne

It has potential if you'd finish it up.

lfdfforever
01/08/06, 06:40 PM
what do you think i should do

lfdfforever
01/08/06, 06:51 PM
thanks for the periods, i needed them so much:\