Super Girl (Lyrics)

[xlessthanthreex]

<P>Super Girl</P>
<P>By Less Than Three</P>
<P>-We are a new band just getting started, so we want some constructive criticism.&nbsp; </P>
<P>Verse 1:</P>
<P>Sometimes I wish</P>
<P>I could be super girl</P>
<P>Be there in a split second</P>
<P>When you need me most</P>
<P>Can I tell you a secret</P>
<P>Promise you'll never tell</P>
<P>That I would give the world to you</P>
<P>If the world was my own</P>
<P>&nbsp;</P>
<P>Verse 2:</P>
<P>Sometimes I dream too much</P>
<P>Of what I'll never have</P>
<P>And when I lose I get upset</P>
<P>And the silence becomes my closest friend</P>
<P>(It doesn't laugh or judge me)</P>
<P>(It knows it doesn't own me)</P>
<P>I can confide in it</P>
<P>(It will never leave me)</P>
<P>(It can never die)</P>
<P>Like you can</P>
<P>&nbsp;</P>
<P>Chorus:</P>
<P>If I could I would</P>
<P

[thespearkid]

wait. what?

[fishingthe_sky]

I can't even begin to imagine how <P></P> is sung.

[industrialbelt]

<P> is scream, </P> is squeal

[xlessthanthreex]

haha idk how all the gibberish got in there. It was normal before...some comments are missing that were here before, too. I'll try to repost it...

[xlessthanthreex]

Super Girl
By Less Than Three
Verse 1
Sometimes I wish
I could be super girl
Be there in a split second
When you need me most
Can I tell you a secret
Promise you'll never tell
That I would give the world to you
If the world was my own

Verse 2
Sometimes I dream too much
Of what I'll never have
And when I lose I get upset
And the silence becomes my closest friend
(It doesn't laugh or judge me)
(It knows it doesn't own me)
I can confide in it
(It will never leave me)
(It can never die)
Like you can

Chorus
If I could I would
Be there to hold your hand
Tell you everything
Will work out in the end
If I had it
I'd give you everything you need
But I can't be
Super girl

Verse 3
Sometimes I actually think
About that guy named God
I try to believe
But then I think
It'll do no good
Cause christians still die
And they still bleed
We all feel the same pain
And beautiful, amazing christian boys
Still feel like taking their lives

Chorus

Bridge
All I can do
Is sit here with my best friend
And cry to it
How much I want you to live

Sometimes I wish
I could be super girl
To save your life
And share that cinema kiss
But again I've failed

Chorus

[xlessthanthreex]

Ok, I'm going to explain right now because I know there's going to be a million negative comments about "cliche".
1. The first few lines are meant to be "cliche" because it's kind of me being sarcastic thinking, "Jeez, I wish I could do that..."
2. Any other parts that seem to be "cliche" are that way because I am a very blunt, literal person. (I say I because I write most of the lyrics). I want people to be able to know what I'm talking about. I don't want people on songmeanings.com debating over what the lyrics are really about. I want people to be able to understand and easily relate. Plus, everything is cliche these days. There's only so many ways to say the same thing without sounding like you're trying too hard. Music isn't supposed to be about finding weird different ways to say things. It's about enertainment, and saying what you want to say how YOU want to say it.

We both (me and Matt, my bandmate) realize that there ARE going to be negative comments. That's understandable. No one likes the all the same music. The best musicians out there have people that don't like them. We're not worried about critics because we know we're good. We don't need someone to tell us that. If you like us, good. If you don't, oh well, we're not gonna go cry in a corner because of it. Constructive criticism is great. We appreciate it. But if you're just gonna say we suck, we expect you to prove that you can do better. So be prepared. Thanks for taking time to read this.
<3
Betsy

[thespearkid]

OK. First of all, it's not just the first few lines which are cliche, it's the whole thing. Honestly, there isn't a metaphor or image here that I haven't seen before.

Secondly, there's nothing wrong with being a very literary writer but that's not what makes good lyrics. If you just throw everything out there for listener to make it easy on them, you're robbing yourself of any merit as a songwriter. Sure, there is a lot of cliche stuff out there but if you seriously think that there is a limit to how many ways something can be said, you haven't been listening to the right artists. Take Elliott Smith for example. A large portion of his work has to do with depression and drugs but he manages to never repeat himself or anyone else. This is because he is a GOOD songwriter. If you can't write a song without using played out metaphors, then you're not good. Period.

Proving I can do better: "April 2004" by Traffic Jam Parades (me)

A flower on a wall that blends in with the bricks
A quiet bathroom stall to house me when I'm sick
Remind of the day that lightning split the tree
And melted greens to grays and wedged itself between
The Lion and the pride, the Lamb from all the sheep
To wage a battle cry against a Prince of Peace
How could I survive a war against the Sun?
A died one thousand times and I am thankful for each one

[newtothis]

Proving I can do better: "April 2004" by Traffic Jam Parades (me)

A flower on a wall that blends in with the bricks
A quiet bathroom stall to house me when I'm sick
Remind of the day that lightning split the tree
And melted greens to grays and wedged itself between
The Lion and the pride, the Lamb from all the sheep
To wage a battle cry against a Prince of Peace
How could I survive a war against the Sun?
A died one thousand times and I am thankful for each one

show off. X-)

[xlessthanthreex]

Oops, I forgot to say earlier, no one has to prove anything. I was trying to say before that you shouldn't be talking bad about other people's stuff if you can't do it yourself, but whatever. I don't really care... Just say what you think and helpful suggestions...thanks, though.
Betsy

[beazer32]

Proving I can do better: "April 2004" by Traffic Jam Parades (me)

A flower on a wall that blends in with the bricks
A quiet bathroom stall to house me when I'm sick
Remind of the day that lightning split the tree
And melted greens to grays and wedged itself between
The Lion and the pride, the Lamb from all the sheep
To wage a battle cry against a Prince of Peace
How could I survive a war against the Sun?
A died one thousand times and I am thankful for each one

:worship:

well proven.

[thespearkid]

Oops, I forgot to say earlier, no one has to prove anything. I was trying to say before that you shouldn't be talking bad about other people's stuff if you can't do it yourself, but whatever. I don't really care... Just say what you think and helpful suggestions...thanks, though.
Betsy
So, are you not allowed to say a movie sucks unless you can write, direct, and produce a feature length film of your own?

[derekmoyer4]

eh, it most certainly can be improved. not awful tho.

[xlessthanthreex]

ok, forget the whole "proving yourself" thing. i was being an ass before because people were pissing me off.
and derekmoyer, how do you think I should improve it? do you see certain lines that should be edited? thanks
betsy

[BryterJonah]

You don't need to give a fucking sign off at the end of each post. You're not Ryan fucking Seacrest.

[newtothis]

Ok, this thread is getting out of hand.Just give her constructive criticism.

[newtothis]

Ok, I like verse 3. you have a really good point there. However, I would like to say that the idea of "supergirl" IS cliche, like you yourself admitted. To begin, I'm pretty sure there are already several rather popular songs by that title. Secondly, consider the way you approach the main ideas behind this song. Rather than telling us out and out what you wish, consider leading up to it more. One thing I like to tell people on this forum is that if you immediately tell the listener the all encompassing point of the piece, they have no motivation to keep listening. Try presenting this idea in a way that IS new and fresh and that, perhaps, we haven't heard before on the radio.

(this is not sarcastic or passive aggressive. I'm trying to build bridges.take it or leave it)