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xlessthanthreex
05/22/09, 01:13 PM
This is where I will be putting up all of our lyrics. Starting when I get home since they're not with me. But anyways, this is just a place to read. We've decided we don't want or need constructive criticism or any of that shit not because we're babies and can't take it, but we know we're good enough. We know what we want to say and how we want to say it. We don't need people to tell us we're good or not. We know we rock. If you like them, then spread the word. If you don't like them, it's plain and simple: Stop reading them. Now days people like to bash eachother and tell eachother how their music sucks. There's no need for this. If you don't like someone's music, than don't listen to it. And if you're really stubborn and sitill feel the need to challenge me, then here are the rules: 1. You must have a good reason to bash us. Don't just say, "You suck." without giving a reason. 2. If you are going to give us negative feedback, we expect you to write a song. You get a week, which is more than fair since our lyrics only take a 30 minutes to write. 3. We want to see your lyrics when they are complete. Don't laugh at someone saying they can't do something, when you're no better. That is it for now. I don't mean to sound bitchy and controlling, but serioiusly, a lot of people are assholes these days.
<3 Betsy and Cookie
fishingthe_sky
05/22/09, 01:40 PM
This is by far the stupidest thing I've ever seen in this forum. First off, if you feel your lyrics don't need any work, then there's no point in posting them in a forum, since we can just as easily read/hear them when you release the songs themselves. This is a place for people to have their stuff looked at and have comments made. That which is good will be praise, that which is bad will be told it's bad, sometimes in constructive ways, sometimes in less than constructive ways, but it will be constructive nonetheless. Second, the only thing worse than people bashing music with simplistic put downs, as you point out, are people who feel like they're the shit and are above criticism. I'm 99.9999% certain that you DO need criticism, and saying you're going to post them here simply to "let them be read" is stupid. Post your music in forums for music. You have music to these lyrics, right? Recorded and everything? Also, it should be painfully obvious to you that by posting this little "manifesto" you're inviting more comments than you already would have received . Third, you don't challenge people who criticize your work by telling them to write their own work. That's asinine. Chances are, though, that your lyrics really do suck if you write them in a half hour. No one writes anything that could be considered remotely complete in a half hour, and the fact that you flaunt that like it's something praiseworthy demonstrates the lack of care that goes into your work.
The Personist
05/22/09, 01:44 PM
This is where I will be putting up all of our lyrics. Starting when I get home since they're not with me. But anyways, this is just a place to read.
Why post them if you only want us to read them? I thought the idea was to seek criticism so you could improve on your craft, but I guess I was mistaken.
We've decided we don't want or need constructive criticism or any of that shit not because we're babies and can't take it, but we know we're good enough. We know what we want to say and how we want to say it. We don't need people to tell us we're good or not. We know we rock.
Kinda pretentious, isn't it? I mean, I am comfortable with where I am as an artist, but I know that until the day I die I will constantly seek to improve myself and my craft. To think that you have achieved some sort of artistic zenith is absurd. You can be comfortable with yourself without being perfect.
If you like them, then spread the word. If you don't like them, it's plain and simple: Stop reading them.
Duh. If you don't like feedback, don't post here, where the MO is giving feedback.
Now days people like to bash eachother and tell eachother how their music sucks. There's no need for this. If you don't like someone's music, than don't listen to it.
Fair enough. But why do you have to defend your music if we're all callous haters who just want to be mean?
And if you're really stubborn and sitill feel the need to challenge me, then here are the rules:
Good to know that there are objective rules for the formulation and expression of opinions. I'll keep that in mind.
1. You must have a good reason to bash us. Don't just say, "You suck." without giving a reason.
A) You're arrogant
B) You're pretentious
C) You don't care about improving yourselves and are therefore making a mockery of anyone with any artistic aspirations
D) Your art isn't very good, which, along with C, makes you sound like a whiny little child. If you were T. S. Eliot, I might understand this sort of outrage. Even then, it would be pretentious, but at least he would have the skills to back it up.
2. If you are going to give us negative feedback, we expect you to write a song. You get a week, which is more than fair since our lyrics only take a 30 minutes to write.
The next time you read a book you don't like, you have to write a book before you can say, "this sucks." Same principle. You have a week.
[/quote] 3. We want to see your lyrics when they are complete. Don't laugh at someone saying they can't do something, when you're no better. That is it for now. I don't mean to sound bitchy and controlling, but serioiusly, a lot of people are assholes these days.
<3 Betsy and Cookie[/QUOTE]
Leave and don't post here anymore.
<3 David
thespearkid
05/22/09, 02:54 PM
lock. then, ban.
The Personist
05/22/09, 08:26 PM
This is by far the stupidest thing I've ever seen in this forum. First off, if you feel your lyrics don't need any work, then there's no point in posting them in a forum, since we can just as easily read/hear them when you release the songs themselves. This is a place for people to have their stuff looked at and have comments made. That which is good will be praise, that which is bad will be told it's bad, sometimes in constructive ways, sometimes in less than constructive ways, but it will be constructive nonetheless. Second, the only thing worse than people bashing music with simplistic put downs, as you point out, are people who feel like they're the shit and are above criticism. I'm 99.9999% certain that you DO need criticism, and saying you're going to post them here simply to "let them be read" is stupid. Post your music in forums for music. You have music to these lyrics, right? Recorded and everything? Also, it should be painfully obvious to you that by posting this little "manifesto" you're inviting more comments than you already would have received . Third, you don't challenge people who criticize your work by telling them to write their own work. That's asinine. Chances are, though, that your lyrics really do suck if you write them in a half hour. No one writes anything that could be considered remotely complete in a half hour, and the fact that you flaunt that like it's something praiseworthy demonstrates the lack of care that goes into your work.
This is basically exactly how I feel about this issue. You beat me to the punch, because I posted something slightly more obnoxious and childish right after this. Thank you, though, for being your usual articulate self.
OP, fie on you once more for your insipidity.
BryterJonah
05/23/09, 06:55 AM
I don't read much anymore (http://www.absolutepunk.net/memberlist.php?do=getall&field12=I+don%27t+read+much+anymore ), but I read Carrie by Stephen King and loved it.i (http://www.absolutepunk.net/memberlist.php?do=getall&field12=but+I+read+Carrie+by+Stephe n+King+and+loved+it.)
Really won't go far with these credentials.
newtothis
05/23/09, 12:53 PM
Dude, this is an "interactive/feedback forum." I think someone else said it above. If you feel too confident for criticism, then don't post. That is really pretentious, by the way, to say you are too good for criticism. The best songwriters and poets in the world were the ones who kept growing. A stagnant poet/writer is one of the worst things you can find in the creative writing world. It is like bashing one's head against a rock over and over and over again. I mean, if you feel as if anything worthwhile can be written in 30 minutes, great. Show it to us. But don't expect people not to comment on it. I mean, it just seems like right here, you are too afraid that people aren't going to like what you post. Or you are too much of a big-headed, narcissistic, egotistic douche to know that everyone needs criticism. That it makes good lyrics great and great lyrics phenomenal.
UnderMyDreams
05/23/09, 02:07 PM
I'm going to be honest here and say:
1. I'll bet your lyrics aren't "good enough." I bet that you can take some criticism and make them better.
2. If you never take criticism and don't want people to say anything about you're lyrics, don't make a band. Bands are criticized. Every band is. And you need criticism to make it better. If you sit here and just think you're the best and sound so stuck up you're going to fail miserably.
3. Not a clever band name. I thought of that name a long time ago, and then realized that it really isn't good.
And as it was said before about a book, if you don't like a movie I expect you to make a much better movie. You have a week.
If you really are all that, show us your lyrics are as good as you think they are(and I'm betting they aren't.)
fightinirish217
05/23/09, 06:35 PM
Over-confidence much? What a clown.
doppelganger
05/23/09, 06:47 PM
Hawthorne Heights, Aiden, Silverstein, 1997, Jamie's Elsewhere, Metro Station, Taking Back Sunday, the old Escape The Fate, Boys Like Girls, The All American Rejects, Rise Against, The Used, Paramore
these are the bands you have listed that are your favorites. meh.
SuicideKing
05/23/09, 11:44 PM
We've decided we don't want or need constructive criticism or any of that shit not because we're babies and can't take it, but we know we're good enough. We know what we want to say and how we want to say it. We don't need people to tell us we're good or not. We know we rock.
1) what really pisses me off is this idea that just because you like something enough you'll be good at it. it's this same positive thinking, fuzzy-wuzzy, feel-good bullshit that's so prevalent in america that ends up making people like you think that if you just "believe in yourself" or "do your best and try hard" that you can do anything you want. when the truth is, you fucking can't. example being, i would love to be good at any kind of sport, but the truth is that i'm short, and skinny, and have the coordination of a small rock. i still play basketball with my roommates and try to keep up, but i'm not going to waste my time believing that if i just think i'm awesome i will be. grow the fuck up.
2) personally, i would prefer to get my writing picked apart by writers who know what they're talking about and learn from it. there are several writers frequenting these forums that are incredible resources for people like you who need the advice. and if they actually take the time out of their day to give you some feedback you should be fucking grateful. however, if you're so full of yourself that you can't take ANY criticism, by all means, continue posting threads like this.
fixedCYDE
05/27/09, 06:08 PM
hilarious
ReadyForAction
05/27/09, 06:36 PM
I wish I was as good as you
ReadyForAction
05/27/09, 06:39 PM
your band name is already a Select Start album
xlessthanthreex
05/28/09, 10:29 AM
Ok. I don't wanna start shit. I realize we did come off pretty concieted. Pretty much what we meant to say, but didn't do a very good job at it is: We don't want people that are just gonna say, "You suck." and nothing else. Constructive criticism is great as long as you know the correct deffinition. If you don't like the lyrics don't just say, they're horrible. We want advice on how to improve. The part on knowing we're good, was not meant to be taken like it was. We mean that plenty of people whose opinions matter, have already told us we're good. We just want to know what normal people (meaning people that aren't record label managers) that are actually going to be the consumers think. I apologize for the way we sounded. We're not here to start fights. We're here because we love music and want to give new music to the world. As for the comment by ReadyForAction, if you're accusing us of copying Select Start, I came up with our name, and I've never even heard of Select Start, so it was not meant to copy anyone. And I'm sorry, but the comments from my profile are a little outrageous. Who cares if I like Stephen King and don't read much anymore? I don't read because I am very restless and impatient. Stephen King, in my opinion, is brilliant. I really don't care if you don't like him. Me liking him cannot possibly reflect on my music talent at all. And my favorite bands that someone pasted from my profile: Why does it matter what bands I like? That also does not reflect on my music at all. There are a lot of emo bands who will say they're influences are these old rock legends. And obviously they don't sound anything like ACDC or Metallica... I am going to start posting some lyrics now. If you like them, thank you. If you don't, you can find a nice constructive way to say it. Thanks.
Betsy
xlessthanthreex
05/28/09, 10:45 AM
Ok, here's the first song. Again, I am truly sorry for the misunderstanding before. I know you all probably think I'm a bitch now, but I want to make this right. I don't want to fight. Thank you for taking the time to read this. Please don't hold any of the stuff before against us. This song is not meant to be taken seriously. It is supposed to be funny. You are supposed to think, "Wow, this girl is psycho." It's about a psycho obsessed girl in fantasy land. We're just showing our sense of humor.
Hot
Verse 1:
Oh my god, you're so hot
I can't control myself
Your pitch black hair
And that guyliner thing
Made my heart skip a beat
(I'm still trying to catch my breath)
(You are correct, that's what I said)
I wanna be with you
(Let's go out on Friday night)
(And have the time of our lives)
Make everyone say, "Ooh! Ah!"
Chorus:
Cause you're so hot
You make jaws drop
They all wanna be your girl
But they can't
They don't have nerve like I have
I'm not afraid to tell you
You're fucking hot
(You make jaws drop)
Verse 2:
La la la, la la la la
That's all that I can hear
Nothing they say matters to me
They are all so jealous
(You missed your chance, that's just too bad)
(He is mine now and I am his)
Go find your own
(I cannot lie, you're missing out)
(Oh, by the way, his kissing rocks)
Oops, did that make you mad
Chorus 2:
Cause he's so hot
He makes jaws drop
You all wanna be his girl
But you can't
You don't have nerve like I have
I'm not afraid to tell him
He's fucking hot
(He makes jaws drop)
(Makes jaws drop)
Bridge:
Oh yea, kiss me again
Do that thing where you nibble my ear
Hold on tight, don't let go
This is just the preview
Of the show
H-O-T- HOT
Chorus:
Cause you're so hot
You make jaws drop
They all wanna be your girl
But they can't
They don't have nerve like I have
I'm not afraid to tell you
That you're so hot
You make jaws drop
They all wanna be your girl
But they can't
They don't have nerve like I have
I'm not afraid to tell you
I'm not afraid to tell you
No I'm not afraid to tell you
You're fucking hot
(You make jaws drop)
thespearkid
05/28/09, 11:47 AM
There's really no criticism I can offer on a joke song.
apresnuledeluge
05/28/09, 12:07 PM
Ooh Ah!
SuicideKing
05/28/09, 02:40 PM
There's really no criticism I can offer on a joke song.
i'll go with "don't write songs as a joke."
unless you're weird al.
even then.
don't.
http://i224.photobucket.com/albums/dd269/koollkatt_1/122414591124316.gif
jaredsayshell0
05/28/09, 03:04 PM
Honestly, I don't see the song as humorous. I see it as very juvenile, especially for someone who is 19 years old. Like SuicideKing said, humorous is Weird Al. This is not funny. Maybe if the person listening to this "song" is a mindless, nympho teenaged girl. Maybe then. Just maybe.
newtothis
05/28/09, 05:08 PM
um. ok. wow. This song doesn't have a lot of meaning. It is pretty obvious what you are trying to say. However, I would agree in saying that it sounds very juvenile. Like, maybe if hannah montana or whoever sang it, I'm sure America would love it, b/c then they wouldn't care about the lyrics or the meaning, just about pretty girl singing in a terrible voice. But, that is probably not going to be the case. All I can say as far as improvement, is try not to tell us exactly what you are thinking, so maybe you don't off as so shallow.
xlessthanthreex
05/29/09, 07:46 AM
Ooh Ah!
was that a good or bad, "Ooh Ah!" ? lol
xlessthanthreex
05/29/09, 07:46 AM
Thanks for comments! I will keep all that in mind
apresnuledeluge
05/30/09, 02:40 PM
was that a good or bad, "Ooh Ah!" ? lol
Guess.
xlessthanthreex
06/02/09, 08:50 AM
Ok thanks for comments I'm gonna put up a few more right now that are way more serious. They were written after all the cliche comments and I tried to think about that when I wrote them, so hopefully these are better.
xlessthanthreex
06/02/09, 08:56 AM
The Lesson
Verse 1
Take this jacket off
I wanna move my arms
Take me out of this pillow room
This is all a big misunderstanding
I am not crazy
Every mistake has it's consequence
His just came from me
Believe me he deserved every bullet
PreChorus
The one in his head for choosing her
His heart for breaking mine
Then one in his hand that touched her
And that one in the groin
Chorus
I don't belong here
I just made his statement correct
He said he would die without me
And now that is the truth
(x2)
Verse 2
Put that fucking needle down
I'll stop yelling if you let me out
No, no voices told me to do it
The idea was all my own
I was just helping out
He really needed every bullet
Bridge
I gave him everything
I taught him how to live
And now I've just taught him to die
What's so wrong with that
*I really think I need suggestions for the chorus because I don't really like it. It doesn't sound right. Let me know if you have any ideas.
xlessthanthreex
06/02/09, 09:03 AM
The Scarlett Medal
Verse 1
You're so mysterious
But I hate mysteries
I cracked the case wide open
And found you lied to me
You are the murderer
I'll make sure you do your time
For all of mine you wasted
Making me think we were fine
Chorus
Was it worth it
Making love a game
Cheating making me lose
Oh look what you've gained
But winning doesn't feel so good
When it's not the truth
Was she worth
Losing me
Verse 2
Let me grab the razors
To cut off your smirk
Don't think that you'll walk
Accomplices are just as guilty
Don't tell me you said no
I know the whore you are
You didn't care what he had to do
To make him yours
Bridge
Take them to the gallows
Here's a complimentary scarlett 'A'
You wear it like a medal
Wow, you're so great
It's your last chance, are you sorry
Of course with your life in my hands
I laugh and say, "Satan take him
With his ugly friend"
xlessthanthreex
06/02/09, 09:10 AM
Pause, Rewind, And Don't Leave Me This Time
Verse 1
The clock seems to be frozen
How is it not light out yet
I need to close my eyes, but I'm not tired
The only sound is tick tick tick
I feel my heart pound faster
Then a waterfall from my eyes
I don't care hopefully the current's strong
So it can wash away my life
Chorus
What happened
What made you hide
You stabbed me
And I died
I told you
It'll be alright
I don't want revenge
I just want my life
Verse 2
We made a beautiful hollywood film
But you killed the ending
It's not too late to fix it
There's always editing
Maybe if we change the part
Where he leaves her behind
Instead he could kiss her
Say exactly what's on his mind
Bridge
2 AM I'm still waiting for sun
It's been a damn long year
Since you decided to run
The picture doesn't make sense
With all these faded spots
Why'd you erase yourself
And ruin the art
evenifitkillsme
06/02/09, 06:21 PM
Tis first one sounded like an eddited Millionaires song...
BryterJonah
06/02/09, 06:32 PM
N_AYAg9zPzc
ashcroft
06/02/09, 06:59 PM
http://www.myspace.com/lessthanthreeacoustic
The lyrics don't seem to match up.
doppelganger
06/02/09, 07:07 PM
no comment on the lyrics.
newtothis
06/02/09, 07:55 PM
The Lesson
Verse 1
Take this jacket off
I wanna move my arms
Take me out of this pillow room
This is all a big misunderstanding
I am not crazy
Every mistake has it's consequence
His just came from me
Believe me he deserved every bullet
PreChorus
The one in his head for choosing her
His heart for breaking mine
Then one in his hand that touched her
And that one in the groin
Chorus
I don't belong here
I just made his statement correct
He said he would die without me
And now that is the truth
(x2)
Verse 2
Put that fucking needle down
I'll stop yelling if you let me out
No, no voices told me to do it
The idea was all my own
I was just helping out
He really needed every bullet
Bridge
I gave him everything
I taught him how to live
And now I've just taught him to die
What's so wrong with that
*I really think I need suggestions for the chorus because I don't really like it. It doesn't sound right. Let me know if you have any ideas.
For starters, this is much better than what you posted before. Kudos. Secondly, I agree with you about the chorus. "I just made his statement correct" really just sounds stiff, starched, and formal. You have some good ideas here. What I would say is to loosen up. The speaker of the song is passionate, hurt, and angry. Let that anger show. I think you have a good start with the pre-chorus. I also think you might have something with the bridge, as far as that passion and hurt go. Good start. With revision, it could be decent.
Check out this song by a group called Love and Reverie. It is similar to yours, but they do a great job of showing and not telling their listeners what they are feeling.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=22leoJarHnQ
xlessthanthreex
06/04/09, 08:38 AM
Thanks so much, newtothis. I'm glad you think this one is better. I agree with what you said about the chorus. I'll put more thought into it and think anger. Thanks!
Betsy
UnderMyDreams
06/04/09, 12:58 PM
Honestly, I don't see the song as humorous. I see it as very juvenile, especially for someone who is 19 years old. Like SuicideKing said, humorous is Weird Al. This is not funny. Maybe if the person listening to this "song" is a mindless, nympho teenaged girl. Maybe then. Just maybe.
um. ok. wow. This song doesn't have a lot of meaning. It is pretty obvious what you are trying to say. However, I would agree in saying that it sounds very juvenile. Like, maybe if hannah montana or whoever sang it, I'm sure America would love it, b/c then they wouldn't care about the lyrics or the meaning, just about pretty girl singing in a terrible voice. But, that is probably not going to be the case. All I can say as far as improvement, is try not to tell us exactly what you are thinking, so maybe you don't off as so shallow.
I'm going to agree with these two.
That first song lacks no substance at all, it really isn't funny, it sounds very juvenile, etc. I would honestly completely drop it.
xlessthanthreex
06/04/09, 02:28 PM
I think I figured out the chorus for "The Lesson". Here's what I came up with. Let me know if it's better, or still needs work, or any other comments.
Chorus:
Don't call me insane
Don't throw away that key
He said he'd die without my love
His fate was left to me
sargentlgfuad
06/07/09, 04:24 PM
what key?
apresnuledeluge
06/16/09, 03:28 PM
I think I figured out the chorus for "The Lesson". Here's what I came up with. Let me know if it's better, or still needs work, or any other comments.
Chorus:
Don't call me insane
Don't throw away that key
He said he'd die without my love
His fate was left to me
And that's when you shot him in the groin, right?
xlessthanthreex
06/16/09, 06:05 PM
the song is about being in a mental institute because the person killed her exboyfriend so it's referring to the saying "lock the door and throw away the key" meaning they want to keep the person locked up forever because they think she is totally insane.
BryterJonah
06/16/09, 07:45 PM
the song is about being in a mental institute because the person killed her exboyfriend.
Wow, so relatable to both society and my own personal traits.
These pricks in robes are always sticking us heroes of the soul in the clinker because, you know,
we all have those fucking exes who just make us so maaaaad! It's like, here I am all by self with no man holding me back, but then I remind myself, "That fucker's still alive! How dare that motherfucking dog live after being with me! How dare my life not be 50% somebody else's problem!". So yeah, I kill the bastard, feel free, but get arrested regardless how good I feel!
The coppers strap me down and do electroshock therapy which fries my brain cells a little, sorta like how tv does you(society!). Then they're all like, "You murdered this guy! AGHHHHHH! That's craaazy!" and this just makes me cry.
They mistake my crying for laughter and tell me I have a sick sense of humor. They tell the judge this, judge calls the wackos on me, and then I whine up where I am now a mental institution.
I love that, rather than just being labeled the casual dipshit, I'm labeled a full on pscho because I let my personal pissy fits control my life.
the saying "lock the door and throw away the key" meaning they want to keep the person locked up forever because they think she is totally insane.
Thank you so much.
After hearing that astoundingly cryptic saying nearly a thousand some odd times in my childhood,
I've finally figured out it's meaning. Seriously would have never guessed that by throwing away the key, they'd actually mean throwing away the key! I always thought that to be an illogical move since the door is locked.
Luckily I now know what the whole point of throwing away the key really was.
neverenough
06/17/09, 10:21 AM
wow. This is so good!
xlessthanthreex
06/17/09, 02:46 PM
bryterjonah-i know it's obvious what it means to most people, but someone asked, so I told them.
Wow, so relatable to both society and my own personal traits.
These pricks in robes are always sticking us heroes of the soul in the clinker because, you know,
we all have those fucking exes who just make us so maaaaad! It's like, here I am all by self with no man holding me back, but then I remind myself, "That fucker's still alive! How dare that motherfucking dog live after being with me! How dare my life not be 50% somebody else's problem!". So yeah, I kill the bastard, feel free, but get arrested regardless how good I feel!
The coppers strap me down and do electroshock therapy which fries my brain cells a little, sorta like how tv does you(society!). Then they're all like, "You murdered this guy! AGHHHHHH! That's craaazy!" and this just makes me cry.
They mistake my crying for laughter and tell me I have a sick sense of humor. They tell the judge this, judge calls the wackos on me, and then I whine up where I am now a mental institution.
I love that, rather than just being labeled the casual dipshit, I'm labeled a full on pscho because I let my personal pissy fits control my life.
Thank you so much.
After hearing that astoundingly cryptic saying nearly a thousand some odd times in my childhood,
I've finally figured out it's meaning. Seriously would have never guessed that by throwing away the key, they'd actually mean throwing away the key! I always thought that to be an illogical move since the door is locked.
Luckily I now know what the whole point of throwing away the key really was.
I know it's obvious to most people, but someone asked, so I explained it.
xlessthanthreex
06/17/09, 02:48 PM
wow. This is so good!
aw, thank you!
xlessthanthreex
06/17/09, 02:50 PM
And that's when you shot him in the groin, right?
hell yes haha
Mike Smith
06/17/09, 02:51 PM
Ok, no offense
But these songs are some of the worst songs i think ive ever seen in my life. The lyrics are sub-par at best
And you already said you don't feel they need any work. So if you feel that, then please get the fuck off these forums, as this is a place for people to post in hopes they'll get good criticism and be able to take what they get and grow as a poet/songwriter. If you're so god damn perfect, then piss off these forums
Because so far all i've seen is a bunch of bullshit thrown together to say you've had the pleasure of writing a song. They suck. Simple as that.
xlessthanthreex
06/17/09, 03:24 PM
heres a brand new song
Hide And Seek
V1
All the good spots are taken
You'll see me wherever I go
I gotta hurry
You're almost to 10
I step out in the snow
I start running
Theres no where to hide
Ready or not, here you come
Chr
I'm runing faster than I've ever run before
If you catch me I'm a dead woman for sure
Get away from me I don't want you to win
This game you're trying to play that I can't forfeit
V2
I look behind me
And you're still there
Trying so hard to catch me
But this is not the way it works
You clipped my wings so I can't fly
Such a cheater
I need to get away with my life
It don't look good
Brg
Stuck in a house of mirrors
Every where I go I see you
You won't stop following me
You won't let me go
How am I so great that you go
After me instead of all of them
Go find someone that's still hiding
Let me go
xlessthanthreex
06/17/09, 03:34 PM
Ok, no offense
But these songs are some of the worst songs i think ive ever seen in my life. The lyrics are sub-par at best
And you already said you don't feel they need any work. So if you feel that, then please get the fuck off these forums, as this is a place for people to post in hopes they'll get good criticism and be able to take what they get and grow as a poet/songwriter. If you're so god damn perfect, then piss off these forums
Because so far all i've seen is a bunch of bullshit thrown together to say you've had the pleasure of writing a song. They suck. Simple as that.
ok, if you're gonna write something like this, at least get everything I said right. Yes at one point I did ask for no criticism, but then I apologized and changed my mind because I was being cocky because I was in a bad mood. I'm not glorifying what I did, but I grew up like everyone wanted me to and am being civil now. I don't see you offering me any constructive criticism. All you have to offer for feedback is "they suck". And yea, I do take offense to this because "they suck" isn't constructive at all. It's being a jerk. And just so ya know, whatever bands you listen to didn't start out the way they are now. Everyone has to take time to learn and get better at things whether or not they're born with the talent. So stop bringing up old shit. If you don't like what you hear, and you don't have anything constructive to say, then stop reading it.
The Personist
06/17/09, 03:36 PM
ok, if you're gonna write something like this, at least get everything I said right. Yes at one point I did ask for no criticism, but then I apologized and changed my mind because I was being cocky because I was in a bad mood. I'm not glorifying what I did, but I grew up like everyone wanted me to and am being civil now. I don't see you offering me any constructive criticism. All you have to offer for feedback is "they suck". And yea, I do take offense to this because "they suck" isn't constructive at all. It's being a jerk. And just so ya know, whatever bands you listen to didn't start out the way they are now. Everyone has to take time to learn and get better at things whether or not they're born with the talent. So stop bringing up old shit. If you don't like what you hear, and you don't have anything constructive to say, then stop reading it.
I'm gonna bet that Cradle of Filth's lyrics were pretty awesome when they started because the singer has a degree in English.
Mike Smith
06/17/09, 03:54 PM
I'm gonna bet that Cradle of Filth's lyrics were pretty awesome when they started because the singer has a degree in English.
I'll second this statement.
newtothis
06/17/09, 04:15 PM
Haven't we covered this business already?
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