it's 3 am and the everly brothers are playing across the street

[theMATEOlife]

i felt failure
test me like a warm gun
pressed straight against my forehead

i walked the cusp of caring
righteous like only I know I can be
the last time we met, we both left somewhat dead

you called the game,
threw the play and walked away
i called you out,
come back is where it ends

so when this begins again
i will travel the parapet of passing time
i will go in my own way,
a warm gun in my jacket

and a blade stuck in my back
this is where it ends; now come back.

[theMATEOlife]

cliche.

[ImpulZe]

absolute cliche.

[de la sympathie]

hey, i kind of liked it. not as good as your other stuff but it wasn't horrible.

[theMATEOlife]

absolute cliche.


i still pride myself on not spelling a simple word like "impulse" wrong and not putting "TITLE OF POEM" BY THEMATEOLIFE in my subject.

i believe i'm one up.

[a speedo model]

i liked it. it's not as good as your previous stuff, but still good.

[theMATEOlife]

err...bump? just looking for some more feedback.

[lfdfforever]

Pretty ganr yo.