Ok so the first one was hard to read. Now it's easy to read :)

[meggiexxlynn]

Gather 'round now
all you who think you're tough.
We're going to play a game,
but if you lose, the losses are rough.
All you need to play
is a gun and one bullet.
Six people stand in a circle,
then the first person pulls it.
First up is Tyler
they say he has "good breeding"
Little do they know
he just keeps taking beatings.
He stands there debating
whether or not its worth the risk.
He thinks of his father at home
and gives the barrel a twist.
He slowly lifts the gun
as his hands shake with fright
He pulls the trigger
But he's not to die tonight.
He passes it to Ashley
who's just your average girl.
Except after meals
when she has to go hurl.
She hates herself now,
so badly she sees no other way.
She spins the barrel and pulls back,
But she's not to die today.
Next up is Meagan,
who's made fun of at school.
She thinks if she plays
They'll think she is cool.
She's done the math,
she knows her chances,
she spins the barrel
and watches as it dances.
She slams it shut
and holds it up to her head.
She pulls the trigger
and winds up dead.
The three that didn't play
breathe a sigh of relief.
Then they all start crying,
overcome with grief.
All Meagan wanted
was to be accepted by her peers.
They pick up her corpse,
their faces streaming with tears.
They hide her body in the woods
and wash the blood off the ground.
They go their separate ways
and hope to god Meagan's not found.
Nothing is for sure,
but I'm willing to bet,
never again will those five kids, play Russian Roulette

[The Personist]

The rhymes are contrived, and the concept rather melodramatic. I understand your aim--to show the desperate lengths people go to so they can fit in--but I don't think you accomplish it here. This uses contrived rhymes and silly devices. There's never any tension because you tell us exactly what's going on. You should try to keep some of it hidden, and let us do some lifting from the poem. Here's a good example that has a similar message as yours:
http://hungryhungryhippos.wordpress.com/2008/02/19/the-swimming-pool-by-thomas-lux/

[newtothis]

Ok, like Artfully, I see what you are going for here. and, I agree again with him in saying that you don't do it. I feel like your rhymes are really forced. narrative poetry is great, when you are not trying to push it on the reader. Also remember that if we know from the beginning exactly what is going to happen, we are going to have no motivation to keep going and finish the poem.

[meggiexxlynn]

k. thanks so much for your commentary. :)

[thespearkid]

Honestly, I love the concept. I can see this becoming much longer and in depth in it's finish version, as I imagine each character's story can be expanded upon and made more complex. In fact, I think this would work a lot better as a short story. That way, you'd have time to slowly build up each character's background and make their secrets as to why they're playing Russian Roulette a surprise. In it's current form, I agree completely with Artfully and newtothis that the rhymes feel forced. The structure is also rather awkward. It you can't read your poem out loud with a natural rhythm forming (like in a song or a rap) then you need to work on your structure.