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..: Loki :..
01/14/06, 10:07 PM
A Single Bed in Two Seperate Houses
A glass of wine on the window sill,
Her on my mind,
Tonight I'm going to sleep alone

Candles light the hall,
She touches his picture frame on the way
But tonight she's going to bed alone

A once filled void emptied again
with the loss of a dear friend
We may be in the same bed
But tonight we're sleeping alone


"A waking nightmare that's only worse when you sleep" (Alchemy)
looking at my hands, they feel so small and helpless
I feel small and helpless

I see your body lying, asleep, across the bed from me
You look like a lovely angel

Yes angel
Baby is a taboo word

I can see you shaking in your sleep
I can see you crying (from your dream)
And I'm helpless

I'd wish you'd wake
> So you can tell me how to ease your suffering
I wish I could bring him back and give you peace
But I don't believe in alchemy

apoemtothedead
01/14/06, 10:17 PM
..: Yawn :..

bonnie17
01/14/06, 11:39 PM
..: Yawn :.. I think their good. of course thats just my opinion.

isellsuicidexx
01/15/06, 07:51 PM
I like! Good job!:D

preppyak
01/16/06, 11:27 AM
..: Yawn :..
agreed.

And I think you want the word "sill" not "seal" in the first poem.

ArTkY_
01/16/06, 11:55 AM
This is indeed boring. Nothing at all holds your attention, work on that.

FallOutBoyRoXx
01/16/06, 01:21 PM
A Single Bed in Two Seperate Houses
A glass of wine on the window seal,
Her on my mind,
Tonight I'm going to sleep alone

Candles light the hall,
She touches his picture frame on the way
But tonight she's going to bed alone

A once filled void emptied again
with the loss of a dear friend
We may be in the same bed
But tonight we're sleeping alone


"A waking nightmare that's only worse when you sleep" (Alchemy)
looking at my hands, they feel so small and helpless
I feel small and helpless

I see your body lying, asleep, across the bed from me
You look like a lovely angel

Yes angel
Baby is a taboo word

I can see you shaking in your sleep
I can see you crying (from your dream)
And I'm helpless

I'd wish you'd wake
> So you can tell me how to ease your suffering
I wish I could bring him back and give you peace
But I don't believe in alchemy

..WOW...............beautiful0:)

Salomonbz90
01/16/06, 01:26 PM
..WOW...............beautiful0:)
you would

OveriseFan
01/16/06, 05:23 PM
When you have "I think punkboys R hawt chick, isellsuicidexx (http://www.absolutepunk.net/member.php?u=56761), and FOB ROxx" liking your stuff, you know it's bad.
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No offense guys, but... simple plan? Suicide? and FOB roxxx, take offense.

de la sympathie
01/16/06, 05:25 PM
okay. i do not care for your poetry.