i am terrified of posting in this forum

[asdfjkl]

there's been a subtle change in the way we'd like you to read the story. we've spent some time looking it over and it should now go a little something like this:
oh look, her porcelain jaw is vibrating again. how fucking precious. let's throw her in the gutter and see how she reacts. god, i don't know what we'd do without her. so be sure to tune in next week for the thrilling finale: your hero might just slit her wrists, and you may be eligible to lick up the blood. some restrictions may apply.
throw the kids in fucking cages; this black box is their closest form of life. now read the chart from left to right: murder. masochism. money. it looks like the vision tests came out just right. oh, you're growing up to be such a fine young man. we're all growing up so well. we're so content. just don't ever touch the strings in your back. they'll hang you for treason. they'll hunt you down. but quiet, kid. keep it down. don't ever say i told you. don't ever sell me out. now back to the teleprompter.
have a wonderful day.

[IamTheINDUSTRY]

there's been a subtle change in the way we'd like you to read the story. we've spent some time looking it over and it should now go a little something like this:
oh look, her porcelain jaw is vibrating again. how fucking precious. let's throw her in the gutter and see how she reacts. god, i don't know what we'd do without her. so be sure to tune in next week for the thrilling finale: your hero might just slit her wrists, and you may be eligible to lick up the blood. some restrictions may apply.
throw the kids in fucking cages; this black box is their closest form of life. now read the chart from left to right: murder. masochism. money. it looks like the vision tests came out just right. oh, you're growing up to be such a fine young man. we're all growing up so well. we're so content. just don't ever touch the strings in your back. they'll hang you for treason. they'll hunt you down. but quiet, kid. keep it down. don't ever say i told you. don't ever sell me out. now back to the teleprompter.
have a wonderful day.


and the lyrics are from whom?

[ImpulZe]

wow thats amazing great one.

[lfdfforever]

so gnarrrrrrrrr

[OveriseFan]

Pretty cool.

But those sure don't sound like lyrics to me, whoever said "and those lyrics are by whom?"

Anyway... if that's about us(i.e. Me, Shauna, Tariq, Mark) on this forum, you may s my d. The only way you get better is through criticism... sure we're harsh, but it's a living.

[asdfjkl]

Anyway... if that's about us(i.e. Me, Shauna, Tariq, Mark) on this forum, you may s my d. The only way you get better is through criticism... sure we're harsh, but it's a living.
haha, no, it's not about you guys at all, i didn't even realize it might have sounded like that. but i actually read this forum a lot and most of the time i think it's good that people are honest when someone's writing complete shit. personally i'd rather have someone let me know i'm writing complete shit than be like OH MY GOD THAT'S SO GOOD when it's not at all, but it's also not really a fun thing to hear, which is why i'm generally afraid of posting on here.

anyway guys, thanks for the comments.

[ArTkY_]

Not bad, not bad at all.

[isellsuicidexx]

there's been a subtle change in the way we'd like you to read the story. we've spent some time looking it over and it should now go a little something like this:
oh look, her porcelain jaw is vibrating again. how fucking precious. let's throw her in the gutter and see how she reacts. god, i don't know what we'd do without her. so be sure to tune in next week for the thrilling finale: your hero might just slit her wrists, and you may be eligible to lick up the blood. some restrictions may apply.
throw the kids in fucking cages; this black box is their closest form of life. now read the chart from left to right: murder. masochism. money. it looks like the vision tests came out just right. oh, you're growing up to be such a fine young man. we're all growing up so well. we're so content. just don't ever touch the strings in your back. they'll hang you for treason. they'll hunt you down. but quiet, kid. keep it down. don't ever say i told you. don't ever sell me out. now back to the teleprompter.
have a wonderful day.

good job! =]

[GoWaitInTheCar]

I have to admit, I wasn't feeling it. I'm sorry.