Salvation (by the books) -----(please leave feedback)

[AlexEnglish]

salvation by the books
Better yourself with numbered rosaries
Denomination fight for dominance and favorites
What makes one better than another?
An ancient schism divides the unity
Respect is lost for the fellow follower
Holocaust complex is alive in well within the fathers house
Let the dismayed followers who heat laugh and joke
Learn of their own foolish alicity towards damnation

[The Personist]

salvation by the books
Better yourself with numbered rosaries
Denomination fight for dominance and favorites
What makes one better than another?
An ancient schism divides the unity
Respect is lost for the fellow follower
Holocaust complex is alive in well within the fathers house
Let the dismayed followers who heat laugh and joke
Learn of their own foolish alicity towards damnation

This is a pretty feeble attempt at trying to chastise or criticize religious division. "Alicity," firstly is not a word. Second, a lot of these images don't make sense (most notably "Holocaust complex"). I think this needs a lot of work, because you need to really figure out what you want to say rather than criticizing institutions blindly. It's a bad habit to get into.

[thespearkid]

salvation by the books
Better yourself with numbered rosaries
Denomination fight for dominance and favorites
What makes one better than another?
An ancient schism divides the unity
Respect is lost for the fellow follower
Holocaust complex is alive in well within the fathers house
Let the dismayed followers who heat laugh and joke
Learn of their own foolish alicity towards damnation
This poem makes a lot of huge claims but doesn't explore them. Also, where are the poetic devices? Again, you're just making all these claims against religion and the church but it's not going anywhere.