Hello, Hello, Hello, Haha

[OveriseFan]

Finally wrote something about this that's semi-decent.

And keep quiet all night
Let no tears in your eyes
Just keep smiling away
Please make sure 'fore you say
Goodbye, you really mean it
For once and for all

Look at your newspaper, read the headlines
Let you laugh at your old self, and the good times
If tonight is the last night, good luck in all you do.
With rememberance whisper, goodbye to you.

Each note rings in harmony
Bleeding sweet cocaphony
The keys made of ivory
Dance around with wings.
One last song to sing.
Let the notes ring on.
Look at your newspaper, read the headlines
Let you laugh at your old self, and at the good times
If tonight is the last night, good luck in all you do.
With rememberance, whisper, goodbye to you.
Sweetly retire, into the night
Forget all the drama and petty fights
Let's all come together, for one last time
Don't worry, we'll move on, and we will be fine.
If tonight is the last night, good luck in all you do.
With rememberance, whisper, goodbye to you.

[ArTkY_]

Awesome.

[Slurps]

Pretty good, but is it just me or is their too much rhyming and repitition. But don't get me wrong it's pretty good, sounds very catchy.

[OveriseFan]

Awesome.

srsly?

I'm not too happy with it to be honest.

[OveriseFan]

Pretty good, but is it just me or is their too much rhyming and repitition. But don't get me wrong it's pretty good, sounds very catchy.

I actually agree with you, the rhyming is kinda like a piece of gum, really good at first, but slowly wears off into just, meh.

[ImpulZe]

awesome

or not awesome at all.. chorus catchy rest sucks

[de la sympathie]

This was really, really good. But, like Slurps said...

[de la sympathie]

or not awesome at all.. chorus catchy rest sucks

play nice.

[crimsontragedy]

It's good, awesome to be honest, but if you want to make it better, kill the repeating verses and write it more like a poem, I'm sure it'd get more love.

[lovely864md]

eh..an entire song written AABB...it jsut irritates me and I cant really get past it.

[FASSWcore]

Pretty good, but is it just me or is their too much rhyming and repitition. But don't get me wrong it's pretty good, sounds very catchy.
i'll second that

[ArTkY_]

srsly?

I'm not too happy with it to be honest.
Yeah, its pretty good. The rhyming is bleh, but other than that...

[Blared]

Dude, you really improved. I havn't been around...I've been making songs...and I come in and check up on you and Artky and a few other's stuff, and I must say, you've really impressed me. So catchy yet so tasteful, I wish I had a grip on it like you do.

[a speedo model]

i agree, very good.

[OveriseFan]

Dude, you really improved. I havn't been around...I've been making songs...and I come in and check up on you and Artky and a few other's stuff, and I must say, you've really impressed me. So catchy yet so tasteful, I wish I had a grip on it like you do.

Wish I could actually get some more music to these...

[OveriseFan]

It's good, awesome to be honest, but if you want to make it better, kill the repeating verses and write it more like a poem, I'm sure it'd get more love.

To be honest, I don't care what English elitists think of my work. I care what MUSIC LOVERS think of my work. I could care less about being Edgar Allen Poe, while a great poet, a great writer, I don't want to be that. Hell, I don't even wanna be Robert Frost, possibly one of my favorite writers.

I want to be no one but James Fleming, a writer and a musician, not some amazing English major in college who uses words no one can understand to make it seem like I'm intelligent.

(This wasn't a go at you, I'm just stating some facts)

[GoWaitInTheCar]

I think it's been done.

But you did it better.

8/10

[GoWaitInTheCar]

You're only 13? That's hard to believe when I read your work and how you speak. Good job, my friend.

[OveriseFan]

You're only 13? That's hard to believe when I read your work and how you speak. Good job, my friend.

haha, thanks a lot.

I seem a lot older than 13, I guess, especially not speaking face to face.