(Finished) Our Winter Season (Finished)

[Slurps]

Our Winter Season

The snow falls down on us
As we walk through this white crystal park
With our hands connected
We created a spark

I keep you warm like a fireplace
As we drink our hot chocolate
And count the stars as time flies by

These are the nights where all i want to do is look at you

Building a snowman with a carrot nose
Feeling a shivering down to my toes
Not cause it's cold but from being with you
Inside this ruby red heart shaped igloo

These are the nights where all i want to do is look at you

We go sledding on this cold winter day
Everything is going great and our way
My adrenaline rushes to the top
And there is no way in hell it'll stop

I keep you warm like a fireplace
As we drink our hot chocolate
And count the stars as time flies by

[SLADE775]

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[de la sympathie]

eh.... same as slade.

[Slurps]

Is that an ok?

[ArTkY_]

its ok.

stop working on this one, write more stuff! explore.

[Slurps]

its ok.

stop working on this one, write more stuff! explore.

I did write another one the other day called "Cute Is What You Are"... it's on my site http://www.freewebs.com/kyletourt

[ArTkY_]

I did write another one the other day called "Cute Is What You Are"... it's on my site http://www.freewebs.com/kyletourt
ah, i read that. That one is good.

[Slurps]

ah, i read that. That one is good.

Thank you.

[OveriseFan]

Like Tariq said, write some new stuff.

Cute is what you are makes me want to vomit, to be perfectly honest. This isn't that bad, but seems so produced after reading so many versions, so I can't really judge it. Anyway, write something new. It'll probably turn out good, but stay away from lines that aren't flattering when writing about girls (Your hair's all frizzed, hair in a bun?)

[Slurps]

Alright I just started to work on a new song called "Valentines Crush"... it's a song i'm writing for the girl I like and i'm going to give it to her on Valentines Day with a mix (atleast that's my plan).

[ArTkY_]

Like Tariq said, write some new stuff.

Cute is what you are makes me want to vomit, to be perfectly honest. This isn't that bad, but seems so produced after reading so many versions, so I can't really judge it. Anyway, write something new. It'll probably turn out good, but stay away from lines that aren't flattering when writing about girls (Your hair's all frizzed, hair in a bun?)
I like Cute Is What You Are! It was sappy, true, but I liked it for some reason. I personally think some of his songs would make girls wet, haha.

[ImpulZe]

Rockets: 13-26... Fuck

mcgrady stole that on single handly from the bucks.

[Slurps]

I like Cute Is What You Are! It was sappy, true, but I liked it for some reason. I personally think some of his songs would make girls wet, haha.

Hahahahaha.

[de la sympathie]

Is that an ok?

I'm kind of hot-cold about it. Not BAD, but not good either. Kind of cliche. And the lines are half-formed. But your rhyme scheme was good.

[OveriseFan]

Oooooooooo I See A Double Post!

[de la sympathie]

Oooooooooo I See A Double Post!


JAMES!

Hahaha, me too. Oopsy-daisy.

[GoWaitInTheCar]

Seems kinda cookie cutter.

I'm sorry.

[Slurps]

Seems kinda cookie cutter.

I'm sorry.

Huh?

[ArTkY_]

mcgrady stole that on single handly from the bucks.
Damn right, and I have to update the sig for the game last night. What a good one.