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ArTkY_
01/27/06, 02:53 PM
Last part! I've already written the epilogue and the prologue, I'll post them when I put them up in one big post later. Special thanks to Shauna (de la sympathie) and James (OveriseFan) for helping a bit... and when I say a bit I really mean a bit. You bastards should have like messed with the whole thing. With part 4, Shauna wrote about 50% of it, with this one they both wrote about 3% of it. :shake: A good synopsis is there at the end.

Oh, and this day will be the only chance
the one chance to see who will be spared
Tonight we'll finally know once and for all
We'll know who's lives aren't worth the blood in their veins
The filthy blood that keeps me from sleeping
I remember when we planned his final hour
No one to scream to, he never died a martyr
To heaven send reply, to come condemn another
Don't you ever lie to me

Restored, reborn, the child's life was taken
Listen near, maybe we'll hear the mocking bird's tale
Perhaps tonight we'll leave this forsaken vale
Maybe one day you'll admit your mistakes
Maybe one day you'll realize how much you take

"Josaphine! Can you hear me?
This one's dedicated to you!
If there was ever a day
When I had wished you here
It's today...
Oh, God, condemn my father's spirit
Oh, God, build a palace for me
paradise awaits! let's find it tonight.
You're weak, hopeless, useless
With that withered limb on the blindside
Patrick, hear me now, tell me, you coward
why not the mastermind behind the plan?"

You answer your own twisted questions
I call you out now;
Face me, tell me your secrets
Bastard, we did your will
(we did your will)

Wait for my command,
then fire at will
Buring bridges down with passion
my sword will finally escape the hilt
Tell Homer that this one's for the ages
Goodbye, goodnight, tonight
Goodbye, goodnight, tonight...

Can you feel your eyes?
They're burning out of your sockets
I almost can't bear to watch,
but God knows I want this
Sweet vendetta...
Can you feel your eyes?
They're burning out of your sockets
I almost can't stand to watch,
but God knows I want this
Sweet revenge...

Goodbye, goodnight, tonight...
Goodbye, goodnight, tonight...

Fin.

Patrick is Marathoner's brother, and he's talking to Grenadier basically. If you can tell I took a few (very few) lines from Part 2, since this one is very similar to it. It's basically Patrick getting revenge on Grenadier for killing his brother. It's from Patrick's point of view.
SLADE775
01/27/06, 03:24 PM
Is this from Coheed?
de la sympathie
01/27/06, 03:42 PM
It was so good we didn't have much to do./ Excellent. And OversizeFan? Hahaha, that's...
a speedo model
01/27/06, 04:10 PM
very good. it's excellent like all the rest.
ArTkY_
01/27/06, 04:18 PM
It was so good we didn't have much to do./ Excellent. And OversizeFan? Hahaha, that's...
That's James?
AdmistAPoision
01/27/06, 04:26 PM
I've got to read the begining of all this.

There is a begining correct?

How many characters are there?

i like it but i'm so lost. I remember reading 1 of them I don't know which one II or V?

Do you have the rest somewhere on here?
ArTkY_
01/27/06, 04:52 PM
I've got to read the begining of all this.

There is a begining correct?

How many characters are there?

i like it but i'm so lost. I remember reading 1 of them I don't know which one II or V?

Do you have the rest somewhere on here?
They're all on here. And there's a synopsis for 1-4 up.
ArTkY_
01/27/06, 04:53 PM
Is this from Coheed?
I'm gonna take that as a compliment.
very good. it's excellent like all the rest.
Thanks man.
OveriseFan
01/27/06, 08:43 PM
Overise*

Anyway, I told you about this.

I hope you don't mind, I forgot you used Josaphine!, that may or may not be a name in the musical I'm working on. Who knows why? Maybe cause it makes me feel better to have a character feel it rather than myself.
ArTkY_
01/27/06, 08:49 PM
Overise*

Anyway, I told you about this.

I hope you don't mind, I forgot you used Josaphine!, that may or may not be a name in the musical I'm working on. Who knows why? Maybe cause it makes me feel better to have a character feel it rather than myself.
Sorry.

haha, use it anyways. Everyone uses it. I used it because we make fun of this kid at my school named Jose, since the teacher pronounced the J on the first day of school and he looks like a fucking woman.

why the hell have I always read your name as oversize? And why have I always pictured you fat?
ArTkY_
01/29/06, 09:52 AM
Comment you assholes.
preppyak
01/29/06, 10:08 AM
Comment you assholes.
well, when you put it that way, the series has been awesome, I haven't looked forward to each new part since those Untimely End of Eisley Darringer short stories that were posted a while back.
Hilikus
01/29/06, 05:57 PM
Excellent ending man.

This is probably my favorite even. The first verse is phenominal.
ArTkY_
01/30/06, 06:51 AM
well, when you put it that way, the series has been awesome, I haven't looked forward to each new part since those Untimely End of Eisley Darringer short stories that were posted a while back.
When was this?

And thanks.
Excellent ending man.

This is probably my favorite even. The first verse is phenominal.
Wow, thanks.

Damn, I just checked when I posted the first one... this took me two months to complete. Its been a good run guys.
ArTkY_
02/01/06, 04:12 PM
bump?
cris545
02/01/06, 05:32 PM
good ending tariq :), the whole series as a whole is excellent, keep posting on here!
preppyak
02/01/06, 07:15 PM
When was this?

And thanks.
Was in the general forums over the summer/fall.

http://www.absolutepunk.net/showthread.php?t=81251&page=9&highlight=when+love+based+on+fall+o ut+boy+goes+wrong

5 part short story, very well written. The links to all 5 parts should be about 1/2 way down the page
ArTkY_
02/01/06, 09:19 PM
Was in the general forums over the summer/fall.

http://www.absolutepunk.net/showthread.php?t=81251&page=9&highlight=when+love+based+on+fall+o ut+boy+goes+wrong

5 part short story, very well written. The links to all 5 parts should be about 1/2 way down the page
Oh yeah, I've read that. It was pretty fucking good.
rockluvr
02/02/06, 02:11 PM
good job. i like it. i liked all of them