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OveriseFan
01/30/06, 04:16 PM
I spit straight into the bright, burning sun
Hoping to create a shining rainbow
All I ever received for my actions
Is a wad of saliva on my right cheek

And my friends say that I'm crazy when I
Talk about shit like this but I can't stop
So I'll keep spitting and sitting, wasting
My whole life staring at the shining sun

Well are those boys still coming round your house?
The ones who said they wanted to stick their
You knows in your you know you know what I mean?
Well how did all of that go anyway...

Did you hear? I have a new girl on my arm...
She's so resplendent, real Ginny-type
Long red hair, and so sophisticated
Her voice resounding through my head chorusing

Have you looked at the beauty of the world?
The way sweet stones skip across lustrous lakes
It's impossible to see them with your Star-Sun Glasses
Which reflect light in magnificent ways
de la sympathie
01/30/06, 05:38 PM
Everything was excellent except for the first verse. But your writing style is growing into... something else. It's amazing, since you started posting your stuff, anyone can see there's been such an obvious improvement... you're really coming into your own. I think you've surpassed me by several levels as writing goes these days. keep it up. GOOD JOB. <3
ArTkY_
01/30/06, 05:50 PM
Nj G
OveriseFan
01/30/06, 05:51 PM
Everything was excellent except for the first verse. But your writing style is growing into... something else. It's amazing, since you started posting your stuff, anyone can see there's been such an obvious improvement... you're really coming into your own. I think you've surpassed me by several levels as writing goes these days. keep it up. GOOD JOB. <3

I just need to combine this, with the catchiness of other of my pieces.

and your stuff is really good and catchy. <3
de la sympathie
01/30/06, 06:08 PM
I just need to combine this, with the catchiness of other of my pieces.

and your stuff is really good and catchy. <3

Kid, you're gonna be a star. :love:

And when is your birthday? Cause pretty soon, I won't be 13, and we won't be the youngest anymore. Eek.
OveriseFan
01/30/06, 06:22 PM
Kid, you're gonna be a star. :love:

And when is your birthday? Cause pretty soon, I won't be 13, and we won't be the youngest anymore. Eek.

February 17th.

:)
ArTkY_
01/30/06, 06:24 PM
February 17th.

:)
really?
de la sympathie
01/30/06, 06:25 PM
you beat me.