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Slurps
01/31/06, 07:03 PM
Is That My Picture In Your Pocket?

These days can't last any longer
My knees begin to tremble
Is this what you want to do
The impact you have me
It's such a catastrophe
But still I come back for more

Knocked down to the grass
My hand down your pocket
Is that a picture of me
Have I reached the end
Like the tortoise and the hare
Or is this the beginning of "we"

I'll bring you to the movies
And buy one drink instead of two
Am I jumping to fast
Or is this good for you

December 10th put in my journal
For a reference to fall back on
When I wake up in the hospital
Getting up from this deep sleep

Knocked down to the grass
My hand down your pocket
Is that a picture of me
Have I reached the end
Like the tortoise and the hare
Or is this the beginning of "we"

cris545
01/31/06, 07:40 PM
this is pretty good

ArTkY_
01/31/06, 08:00 PM
Noice. Cheesy title though.

Slurps
01/31/06, 08:14 PM
Wow, i'm surprised you guys are actually digging this. To be honest with you I thought it was really bad but I was like what the hell i'll post it just to see what everyone thinks. Now that I keep reading it more it grows on me.

Slurps
01/31/06, 08:15 PM
Just if anyone was curious where I got December 10th from.... it's my birthday and also the girl I like's birthday, we have the same birthday.

de la sympathie
02/01/06, 06:40 AM
Good job, Slurps. Cheesy title but you're improving as you write more and more. <3

ArTkY_
02/01/06, 07:00 AM
Good job, Slurps. Cheesy title but you're improving as you write more and more. <3
Cheesy as Gouda?

OveriseFan
02/01/06, 10:38 AM
meh

a speedo model
02/01/06, 10:40 AM
it's good.

de la sympathie
02/01/06, 05:29 PM
Cheesy as Gouda?

Cheesy as Velveeta.

ArTkY_
02/01/06, 05:30 PM
Cheesy as Velveeta.
Velveeta is fake though.

de la sympathie
02/01/06, 05:53 PM
Velveeta is fake though.

Okay. Um, it's nacho cheese, it's my cheese? Or it's cheesy like Tom & Jerry? I don't know.

ArTkY_
02/01/06, 05:59 PM
Okay. Um, it's nacho cheese, it's my cheese? Or it's cheesy like Tom & Jerry? I don't know.
All you had to say was yes on my first question.

de la sympathie
02/01/06, 06:11 PM
All you had to say was yes on my first question.

Too easy.

OveriseFan
02/01/06, 06:33 PM
You need to either rhyme, or not.

Your rhyme scheme's fucked.