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Mike Smith
06/15/09, 12:26 PM
Light shown down on the nation of the eyeless
Completely unaware on how they were destroyed
A long, hard process, clearly was cursed
Draining us throughout time and leaving us thus

At some point in life, some must have grown
A pair of eyes after they were caught up in
The normal things achieving darkness
Safe from the wrath of heaven

Mike Smith
06/21/09, 05:46 PM
bump(so art can critique)

The Personist
06/21/09, 05:58 PM
I feel like this has the same problems as the other stuff: lack of poetic language, lack of interesting insight, lack of strong imagery.