I Dreamt of A Rhythm

[Mike Smith]

I dreamt of a rhythm
It was etched in stone
And tapping into my senses
I made the rhythm my own

I dreamed of a woman
With flowing locks of hair
And though she seemed real
I knew she'd never be there

I dreamt of a rhythm
It was etched into stone
And tapping into my senses
I made the rhythm my own

I wrote about religion
And how far it had come
But I still ask myself
If not God, where'd we come from?

I dreamt of a rhythm
It was etched into stone
And tapping into my senses
I made the rhythm my own

There's so many things
In all the worlds in dreams
So why must the conclusion
Be a fictional reality?

I dreamt of a rhythm
It was etched into stone
And tapping into my senses
I made the rhythm my own

[SuperWow]

Fo sho. I am not conceded. but when it comes to writing. im very boastful. i think im amazing. and uh. dude. youre pretty fkn good :D keep it up.. Check out some of mine if you can.

[The Personist]

Dude...if you're conceited*, you'd spell it right!

:-p

[Mike Smith]

Dude...if you're conceited*, you'd spell it right!

:-p

Lol art :P

Would you mind giving me your criticism on this poem so i have some REAL, GOOD knowledgable information i can use when writing my new poems? :]

[thespearkid]

i think im amazing.
You're not.

[Animalhill]

Fo sho. I am not conceded. but when it comes to writing. im very boastful. i think im amazing. and uh. dude. youre pretty fkn good :D keep it up.. Check out some of mine if you can.
:jawdrop:

[Mike Smith]

Ok guys...I realize whoever posted on this originally the wow or w/e their name is.....

They were uhhhh....Kinda dumb to say the least

But could we stick to the topic and have you guys assess my poem for me and tell me what you think of it? And once that's done we can like bash the wow person or w/e? ;]

Thanks guys! lol