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bonnie17
02/02/06, 08:59 PM
ok, it's been a while since i've posted in here because I've been 1.) trying to make up better poems, and 2.)well there is no 2. but, my friend and I were spending the nite at my house and thought up some poems for our boyfriends. Little things for valentines day. Yes i finally got a boyfriend. The first one's called Finally.

Finally
You come to me ,
you love me so,
I know this,
because tht black rose,
Finally you come to see,
see much we love each,
Though you hid it all inside,
You are not the one to blame,
but finally you have told me,
told me you love me so,
you've stopped my thoughts of scuicide,
you've taught me to let go,
You've taken away the pain and anger that I've kept inside,
My frustration is gone
In place of love for you.
so I thank you so entirely much
for finally coming to me.

Okay, thats the first one heres the second...

(doesn't have a name.)
Roses are dead,
Violets are too,
You know me
and i love you
I want you to know that you are my friend
And I want to stay with you until the end.

Okay, We wrote these poems about, 15 mins. ago and we would like to know your opinions on weather they are good or not. Thnx.

theMATEOlife
02/02/06, 09:20 PM
this is fucking terrible

bonnie17
02/02/06, 10:10 PM
this is fucking terribleI knew that you would say something like that. Anybody at the slightest like it??

ArTkY_
02/03/06, 06:57 AM
Hahahahaha

preppyak
02/03/06, 07:27 AM
Roses are dead,
Violets are too,
You know me
and i love you

Holy overly obvious cliche Batman. Dead flowers, trite love poem, why?

Chasing Suns
02/03/06, 08:58 AM
Are you serious? You can't be serious.

boldt_action
02/03/06, 09:04 AM
Yeah, these aren't good. Not trying to be mean. Don't know if I succeeded at that.

cris545
02/03/06, 11:20 AM
I'm gonna suggest you to read some real poems by some real authors, then we'll talk, good luck

theMATEOlife
02/03/06, 12:01 PM
I'm gonna suggest you to read some real poems by some real authors, then we'll talk, good luck


that guy from simple plan DOES NOT count.