Misconceptions of Oz

[Mike Smith]

I'm really not entirely sure if i can call this a poem, or what exactly to call this. But i wanted to give my own spin on the Wizard of Oz, seems how it seems like tons of other people have in the past 8- or so years. So please tell me what you think of this. I'm not sure if it's considered a free verse poem or what, but please give me any criticism you have to offer

Thanks!



Out there somewhere
Under the rainbow shines Emerald City
I've been there before

And there was nothing mystical about it
The people there were the same as us
And everything was run down and condemned

Glinda and the "Wicked Witch"
Were just two older women
Sitting on their porch smoking

The munchkins were about the same
As the stories you've been told about them
Because all of them were midgets

"The wizard" was just a sorry old man
Working for a nearby traveling circus
He really couldn't do anything good
Except maybe for a few magic tricks

So sorry for the misconception
Of everything you heard about Oz
It's a normal place, just like I said
So don't expect to be awed if you ever find it

[Mike Smith]

bump(so art can critique)

[OveriseFan]

I was trying to think of a way to explain my distaste for this poem, but there's no really an explanation except: It's too simple. It's so obvious, and there's nothing clever. It's just very telling, and it's not interesting. Even the play on words "Somewhere under the rainbow" is so incredibly obvious, that it's very boring.

I don't like this at all, sorry. I'd scrap it and move on.

[The Personist]

I was trying to think of a way to explain my distaste for this poem, but there's no really an explanation except: It's too simple. It's so obvious, and there's nothing clever. It's just very telling, and it's not interesting. Even the play on words "Somewhere under the rainbow" is so incredibly obvious, that it's very boring.

I don't like this at all, sorry. I'd scrap it and move on.

Agreed.