The Visit

[a speedo model]

"The Visit"
the steps are softly retreating
and there's suspense to every stuttered heartbeat
so trail off our senteces until they both match
and haunt the memory like a photograph
with whispers not to be heard
i'll pull the sheets off the ghost, hanuting every night's sleep

(chorus)
they're open doors to open wounds
and i'll fall through every one
and find a part of myself i never held onto
i'll only regret this when it's done
nostalgia stopped by for an uninvited visit
and honestly, i missed it

my cover's blown by the floorboards i sneak across
making half-hearted promises with fingers crossed
and i've been living every day
like a rehearsal for the next
and i wear it like i have nothing better show

(repeat chorus)
and this moving scenery of colors and shapes
is the closest i'll ever come to safe
so i'll enjoy the view
since it's all i have to hold onto

i'll pull the sheets off the ghost, haunting every night's sleep
i'll pull the sheets off the ghost, haunting every night's sleep



just a song i've been working on. i'd love some feedback.

[a speedo model]

come on, people.

[SLADE775]

I like it a lot.

Some parts could be a little better. I personally hate the word "heart" in anything but that's me.

Rating - :)

[ArTkY_]

Good stuff.

Loved the ending lines:

i'll pull the sheets off the ghost, haunting every night's sleep
i'll pull the sheets off the ghost, haunting every night's sleep

They really got to me, good job.

[a speedo model]

thanks guys!

[cris545]

i would really like to hear this as a song, sounds like i'll really like it. nice job!

[a speedo model]

i would really like to hear this as a song, sounds like i'll really like it. nice job!
thank you.

[a speedo model]

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