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ImpulZe
02/07/06, 11:39 AM
Drop the Guns, put away our jackknifes
Sorry Kids, but Violence and Blood isn't scheduled for tonight
Change the channel already! Commercials are a general Karma
Throw me the remote I'll find us some real Drama
Change it back I was trying to see my future
Threw Delusional Eyes, of a thought-less mind

Track the Silence, and you will find a liar
Keep quiet already the show is about to begin
Chase after the Lover, and you will find me
Hide the young ones eyes, becasue this show is rated R

x_Thrice_x
02/07/06, 11:43 AM
Heheh, I already tried to comment on this, but it said it was deleted...

ANYWAYS,
I really like it, especially:


Change the channel already! Commercials are a general Karma
Throw me the remote I'll find us some real Drama


and


Track the Silence, and you will find a liar
Keep quiet already the show is about to begin
Chase after the Lover, and you will find me


I think the last line in that verse could be changed. It's used well in context and I love it, but I don't think it flows particularly well. Maybe if you replaced the "because" with something else, I just can't think of what else would fit.