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Littlestoner90
02/15/06, 04:15 PM
i wrote this song about a girl i broke up w/ and missed terribly. everyone that has read it tells me its good but i think it sux. feel free to rip it apart so i can prove my point that it isn't.



By my side

I raise my head
From my restless sleep
To find another day
In front of me
A day of pain
A day of sorrow
A day of waiting
For one more tomorrow

My heart is gone
Ripped out by you
Then thrown away
For something to do
Why do I try
To stay alive
Life’s not worth living
Without you by my side

I try to move on
And regain my life
But the pain just stabs me
Like a newly sharpened knife
I looked for the resolve
That I just cannot find
Because I become drowned by the sorrow
And I am forced to hide

My heart is gone
Stolen by you
Then thrown away
In one days time
Why do I try
To stay alive
Life’s not worth living
Without you by my side
By my side

(Hardcore guitar solo)

You ripped my heart
Out of my chest
And left me a life
Without time for rest
You hold my life
In the palm of your hand
You tighten your fist
And crush it to sand

My heart is gone
Stolen by you
Then thrown away
In one days time
Why do I try
To stay alive
Life’s not worth living
Without you by my side

With no one by my side
ArTkY_
02/15/06, 06:15 PM
I think crap.
cris545
02/15/06, 06:58 PM
I think crap. :amen:
chroma23
02/15/06, 07:01 PM
it would've sucked, but the (hardcore guitar solo) makes it totally sweet.
OveriseFan
02/15/06, 07:10 PM
it would've sucked, but the (hardcore guitar solo) makes it totally sweet.

Totally, best line ever.
doobie snacks
02/15/06, 07:26 PM
This isn't poetry. It's a bunch of sentences that happen to rhyme.
GoWaitInTheCar
02/15/06, 08:23 PM
it would've sucked, but the (hardcore guitar solo) makes it totally sweet.


Yeah. I'm feelin' that part too.
apoemtothedead
02/15/06, 09:38 PM
"This is the part where the crowd sings along"
theMATEOlife
02/16/06, 09:22 AM
thanks for posting something you think sucks. that's great.
yutsmcgee
02/16/06, 09:25 AM
Boo.

I don't like it
At all
(Hardcore Guitar Solo)
Don't quit your day job
SLADE775
02/16/06, 01:01 PM
You Fucking Suck At Writing.
Do Yourself A Favor And Never Write Anything Again.
starter
02/16/06, 01:43 PM
Too suicidal. And it sucks btw.