Summer Night Dreams

[Slurps]

Summer Night Dreams

We sit underneath this twilight
The stars reflections twinkle off your eyes
Oh, this is such a beautiful site
Just me and you with pitch black skies

You look so great in that hoodie
Maybe because I know it's mine

We'll take out these lawn chairs
With a great view of the moon
These fireworks start with flares
Summer night dreams come true in June

We'll look up at the stars and see
Both the big and little dipper
And even the north star
But their is one shape of stars
That is sticking out from the rest
Forming the shape of a four leaf clover

We'll take out these lawn chairs
With a great view of the moon
These fireworks start with flares
Summer night dreams come true in June

[OveriseFan]

We'll look up at the stars and see
Both the big and little dipper
And even the north star
But their is one shape of stars
That is sticking out from the rest
Forming the shape of a four leaf clover

That stanza not only confused the hell out of me, but you used too many conjunctions.

You look so great in that hoodie
Maybe because I know it's mine

I hate your cheesy two-liners and this was one of the worst. I despise it with a burning passion. :wink:

Anyway, the rest is pretty good I guess.

[Slurps]

We'll look up at the stars and see
Both the big and little dipper
And even the north star
But their is one shape of stars
That is sticking out from the rest
Forming the shape of a four leaf clover

That stanza not only confused the hell out of me, but you used too many conjunctions.

You look so great in that hoodie
Maybe because I know it's mine

I hate your cheesy two-liners and this was one of the worst. I despise it with a burning passion. :wink:

Anyway, the rest is pretty good I guess.

Ya I agree on that one stanza, it definitely didn't come out how I wanted it to. What if I add more lines to that cheesy part? Or just replace it with something else?