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chris868
02/20/06, 10:47 AM
Did I flood out your sea?
Tied to my weakness, you walked up too steep
Unadorned, your unimpressed
Content to a doubt destined sink
But now that it’s gone
We might be better off alone
Or at least I hope you think you are
Because I’m still empty to abide
Too risky to blind going nowhere
I thought I could show you a side
Too freely spoken and less shy
When you left for the weekend I lied
But you never found out
Guess I had to find out, it was over
But not for the deserving reason
Distraction doused by greyer seasons
Stem of insecurities transformed into burdens
Burdens that ask when you’re leaving

a speedo model
02/20/06, 11:23 AM
it seems kinda choppy, and there's really no flow to it. but it has some good lines.

GoWaitInTheCar
02/20/06, 07:49 PM
it seems kinda choppy, and there's really no flow to it. but it has some good lines.

I agree with him.

It's not bad..

ArTkY_
02/20/06, 08:25 PM
The first line is very good... after that its very meh... It's not terrible though.