Comment on my LYRICS PLEEAAASE!!!

[GruntWork]

All i have is a chorus so far but i wanna know what you think. If you hate emo kids as much as i do then you'll probably like it. lol

"If you're so upset, then take a .45 and put it in your mouth cuz I'm sick n tired of hearin you scream!

If you're so depressed, then take a razor blade and slit your wrist cuz there's plenty of girls who could use your

jeans!"

[fightinirish217]

Hmm...interesting.

[lulzaplooza]

ilold

[riseagainst0516]

If your aiming towards a screamo/emo type thing then ok but if your looking for something punk then take those emotions and put them into a clever sentence instead of just putting down something violent.

[zachff]

Love it. Call EMI tonight

[Idealist80]

did you post this as a joke or u serious?

[xmy.only.exitx]

maybe you can add some very bland and prosaic verses before this so that it all crescendos into the cliched trite chorus you have put up that teenage girls with green and pink mohawks can mindlessly sing to in the name of new-age punk rock.
this is just plain old anger, stale-sounding and bereft of any creativity.

[Dharma-Burger]

I was reminded of this song:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y5jWrWKLYV4

[xmy.only.exitx]

and you've posted this before with a different title and judging by the harsh, relentless comments you've already received then, you can only be a masochist for posting this shit again verbatim.

[herestoyoufla]

what're you, Hawthorne heights?

[Erik the Orange]

Br00tal stuff, d00d

[risexfall]

sooooooo punnnnnkkk rawwwwwwkkkk, i'll make sure to pick up your band's 7" at hot topic along with a new bullet belt and temporary hair color.