"invincibility can only lead to death"

[Ponyboy]

To be completely honest when we met, I wasn't feelin you
Funny how later in the night i was holding you
Walkin home with my friends as headlights passed us by,i felt invincible, anxiously waiting to dial those number i would soon come to memerize

It was summer romance for a summer romantic

Fast forward 11 months and I'm walking home alone

When we said hello, the scent of popcorn polluted the rainy night
When we said goodbye it was the scent of salt water taffy

The preview for RAY looked boring, so to stop myself from snoring; i went in for the kill, When my lips touched yours i got a sudden chill.
It was in a parking lot you first held my hand, i was drawn back, didnt know how to react. That night i kissed you like i meant it.
I drew our names in the sand but the cruel ocean washed them away. I guess we were always being pounded by the waves.It's a shame we forgot how to swim.

We walked to your beachhouse; hand in hand.
that 2 mile stretch could have lasted forever,just like us

I looked you in the eye, as you started to cry, but we had to say goodbye.

[wyverna]

It's ok. I don't like that last line, though.

[Ponyboy]

yeh this wasnt like a poem i was lookin for to be anything great..i jus wrote real stuff that happened in that whole relationship, everything u read is a fact i guess..but people in my school liked it nd i was some award so i figured id see wut u ppl thought

[a speedo model]

yeah, it's okay. seems kinda sporatic and it doesn't flow that well, which can sometimes be a good thing, but in this case it doesn't really work. keep working on it.

[Ponyboy]

yeh that was my main problem workin with it...the flow..it wasnt meant to really have any flow but i jus have trouble fittin things in where it would sound right

[SLADE775]

dumb