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alt_esc
07/10/09, 09:00 PM
can't seem to find them,
mind blank; at loss.
if anger was worse, i don't need it.
you're finding them for me, how i hate need.
to hate the language, spoken as terror,
but it's all that i have that can't leave me.
if tomorrow i woke with nothing to say,
i'd like to never know a worse type of pain
it's what i have that may soon be taken; gone as it had come.
these words, lyrics, i seem to hide in are what i have left of a home.
without this comfort of something that seems to make me nothing; weak,
i find in it the reluctance to form these lines i rely on
hell, who cares what i've got to say?
until i capture the inspirations needed, i've yet to find those i'm looking for.

alt_esc
07/20/09, 12:27 PM
feedback please

jcrawfish
05/04/10, 02:36 AM
it was to straight forward. you need to add visuals to it. something the reader can visualize

Matt Chylak
05/04/10, 11:05 AM
it was to straight forward. you need to add visuals to it. something the reader can visualize

you are adding nothing to this thread, forum, and site. please leave.

"add visuals...you know, something the reader can visualize..."

Idealist80
05/04/10, 08:36 PM
you are adding nothing to this thread, forum, and site. please leave.


so idk if you're depressed or just a douche bag, every single post ive seen from you is negative and unecessary, U should probably be the one who needs to leave, you dont even post lyrics , so untill then, stfu

jcrawfish
05/05/10, 01:54 AM
he must have a small dick.... ive posted my own material, so untill you look at it and give feedback like a man then you can suck a dick. or get pills to enlarge your own...

thank you idealist for having my back.