The Truth Tarot

[Wheez]

It's the spilled;
Poured from a vase of roses and dandelions
A bed of forget-me-nots
An ocean of colored waves
and bottles lost at sea.
Corked, an eternity of years ago by your unannounced love.
It's my spilled words,
every thought and breath and blink and movement and kiss
and every heartache and every second I needed you
It's all here, and I still do.
It's my ignored plea
My heartfelt goodbye
My godawful, permanent, truth

[Boring Pop Song]

i like this a lot. i'm trying to figure out exactly why, but i just thought it was original

[reductiondesign]

It's the spilled;
Poured from a vase of roses and dandelions
A bed of forget-me-nots
An ocean of colored waves
and bottles lost at sea.
Corked, an eternity of years ago by your unannounced love.
It's my spilled words,
every thought and breath and blink and movement and kiss
and every heartache and every second I needed you
It's all here, and I still do.
It's my ignored plea
My heartfelt goodbye
My godawful, permanent, truth

This is... really good. I like it a lot.

The only thing I'd change is to make either 'plea' or 'goodbye' (underlined) rhyme with something to parallel the rhyme in you / do.

Nice job.

[Wheez]

i like this a lot. i'm trying to figure out exactly why, but i just thought it was original

Haha, I'll take it. Thanks :)


This is... really good. I like it a lot.

The only thing I'd change is to make either 'plea' or 'goodbye' (underlined) rhyme with something to parallel the rhyme in you / do.

Nice job.

I see...haha, honestly, I never even noticed that rhyme with you and do. You are quite the little critic. Thanks for the input.