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SLADE775
03/21/06, 12:24 PM
It's the things we can't define
They taunt our minds
They fix our sighs
Into desperate cries
Loving the past
Fearing the present
Forgetting the future - cause it doesn't exist

In due time
The mountains outside become cardboard backdrops
Just like we once thought
Traintracks through our living-room
have a seat
It's comin thru
right over you

Loving the past
Fearing the present
Forgetting the future - cause It doesn't exist
cris545
03/21/06, 09:27 PM
this is a bit mediocre slade, you can do better than that

The mountains outside become cardboard backdrops
Just like we once thought
Traintracks through our living-room

that's all that stood out to me
SLADE775
03/22/06, 07:08 AM
hahaha
a speedo model
03/22/06, 08:24 AM
it's good. not your best but it's still good.
wyverna
03/22/06, 09:25 AM
It didn't have much impact. I think you can do better.
SLADE775
03/22/06, 09:35 AM
The truth is....

I wrote this off the top of my head with a guitar.

I was on the computer when I wrote it.
wyverna
03/22/06, 09:45 AM
Maybe it just needs a little more work, then.
SLADE775
03/22/06, 09:50 AM
Maybe it just needs a little more work, then.

maybe....but I would still putthis up against 98% of all that's ever posted in here.
IAPAI
03/22/06, 09:53 AM
maybe....but I would still putthis up against 98% of all that's ever posted in here.

that's not saying much.
wyverna
03/22/06, 09:54 AM
maybe....but I would still putthis up against 98% of all that's ever posted in here.

But compared to your own pieces?
SLADE775
03/22/06, 10:05 AM
But compared to your own pieces?

Ya.....it's not all that strong, you're right.
SLADE775
03/22/06, 10:05 AM
that's not saying much.

true
a speedo model
03/22/06, 10:20 AM
that's not saying much.

sad but true.
Slaytus
03/23/06, 12:02 PM
kill urself.

justkidding

The mountains outside become cardboard backdrops
Just like we once thought
Traintracks through our living-room
have a seat
It's comin thru
right over you

this lines definatly grabbed me and i thought ur conclusion was pretty good except the future line was almost expected. (im more afraid of the future then the present, what with the global warming and nuclear winter and all ;)
ArTkY_
03/23/06, 02:30 PM
that's not saying much.
Actually yes it is. Recently the forums been good. If you compare it to recently he couldn't hold it up to 40% of the work.