The almost classic finale.

[OveriseFan]

I'm done with this.



This is the final dragged on soliloquy
Of boring bitching, ideas are itching
But I don’t have the talent baby,
Could you help me speak it maybe?
And with each word the diction’s wrong
I’m sick of writing the same song
Day after day, month after…
Year after year, the decades
Dance around my head
But finally they’re almost dead
I split the song in two
Took the melody out just for you.

[ArTkY_]

"baby"

My word, haha. This was pretty good James, I enjoyed it.

[wyverna]

I really liked this one, especially the last two lines

[a speedo model]

i like it.

[Slaytus]

yeah the last 2 lines were incredibly powerful for an ending. and liked the I'm sick of writing the same song, line

very good

[crit]

i liked this a lot, especially the last few lines.

[reductiondesign]

I'll be redundant and say that I really like the last two lines.

"Of boring bitching, ideas are itching"

Great alliteration.

[cris545]

I had read this and never commented on it, shame on me. I really enjoyed it, as I've read your stuff I think this is the most direct and honest piece I've read. It goes straight to the point and says ''I'm James, so there''. Haha, that sounds so random but I hope you know what I mean.

[parallelism]

This is good.

[ArTkY_]

Upon re-reading it.... I have to say this is the best work of yours I have ever read. No joke. And there's no contest between this and your other works. The end. Tariq has spoken!

[SLADE775]

And you have the nerve to attack my work.

hahahahahaha

This is Garbage James.

The worst thing I've read from you.

Rating - :puke:

[OveriseFan]

Dear Slade,


Get the fuck over yourself and grow up, just because I didn't enjoy your latest piece, doesn't mean you have to hate mine. And please, let's actually talk about what you DONT LIKE about pieces, cause telling kids it's garbage doesn't help.

Love,

James.

[ArTkY_]

Upon re-reading it.... I have to say this is the best work of yours I have ever read. No joke. And there's no contest between this and your other works. The end. Tariq has spoken!
To add:

It's not so much the content of the piece, its the voice, and the way the content is presented. You've clearly defined yourself (style-wise) with this.

[OveriseFan]

To add:

It's not so much the content of the piece, its the voice, and the way the content is presented. You've clearly defined yourself (style-wise) with this.

Haha, thank you so much Tariq.

P.S. I need some hardcore help getting started on that thing for Shauna.

[SLADE775]

How amusing.....truly.

[ArTkY_]

Haha, thank you so much Tariq.

P.S. I need some hardcore help getting started on that thing for Shauna.
haha, you're welcome. I'm serious, by the way.

I've started. Mine is more of a story than an essay thing, I hope she doesn't mind. And I've already written 3 pages (not typing).

[de la sympathie]

Ohhh James. I think this is my favorite piece of yours. Short, sweet, and to the point.

These were my favorite two lines:


I split the song in two.
Took out the melody just for you.


Excellent work, per usual.

Tariq, I don't mind one bit. Mine's pretty long too.