Okay, Round 2.

[SHUTYOUREYESx]

Pour us all a drink
We've got a lot of catching up to do
Its been so long
Do you recall the words
Of all the songs we used to listen to
I will play my hand
The hand that ive been delt
We'll live with that
Thats all that I can say
We all stand accused
Guilty of the crime
Letting time pass away

I recall the day
The thoughts that I replace
Inside my head
That take me back so far away
Now that I can
Hold my head up high
High enough to see the world
For what it is

Circumstances
Separated
Cant we feel the same
Don't Erase my name

[SHUTYOUREYESx]

Hell, Ill post another one. But that'll be it for today.

Underline
Undefine
Underneath the fallen rain
All this time
Highway signs
A thousand shades of grey

Its a long way home

By design ill find the way
(faster running now)
Occupy these rainy days
(faster running now)
Try to slide these fears away
(faster running now)
Waste and hide these past mistakes

Fading lines
Meter fine
Underneath the fallin rain
Keep in mind
Ill be fine
A thousand shades of grey

Its a long way home

By design ill find the way
(faster running now)
To break the tides and find my fate
(faster running now)
Time to drive to place to place
(faster running now)
Add the miles and count the days
Til we get home
Thats the way it goes
Incase you wanna know
The time we've taken
It comes so slow
(spending time alone)
(taking the long way home)

Its a long way home
That you wanna go
Its a long way home

[SHUTYOUREYESx]

...bumpeth?

[a speedo model]

the first one is okay, but needs work. the second is better but also could use a little working on. but they're not bad, keep it up.

[SHUTYOUREYESx]

the first one is okay, but needs work. the second is better but also could use a little working on. but they're not bad, keep it up.

do you recommend anything?

[a speedo model]

do you recommend anything?

they have good ideas and some good lines. but alot of the lines seem forced just for rhyming's sake. they make the songs feel choppy and hard to read. just try and get it to flow without feeling forced. they show promise though.