Lyrics and such

[marbury1414]

This was from a song that was recorded for my old band a year ago. I don't know why, but I always liked how these lyrics went together, so I figured I'd share them.

Shooting Stars Burn Out Bright

Chasing away these Coney Island dreams
She’s dreaming illusion, she’s dreaming in fantasy
He says she’s the one
“You make me feel like a person, like I’m beautiful”

Destroying her life at an instant
Degrading her body, distorting her mind
She says she feels more like delusion
Trying too hard at killing time

Burn, plunge, fade

I can be your escape he says
Trust in me and things will be alright
The tears are rolling gently off her face
Believing in each others’ dreams, each others’ light

“Don’t look at me that way”
He turns his head as she kisses his face
Turn the lights down
Turn the lights off now
I’m dying just for the quick fix
Hips pressing gently into his
Wipe the tears off
Wipe them out now

Destroying her life at an instant
Degrading her body, distorting her mind
She says she feels more like delusion
Trying too hard at killing time

I can be your escape he says
Trust in me and things will be alright
The tears are rolling gently off her face
Believing in each others’ dreams, each others’ light

Fade to white and all the pain goes away

[kshtoinks12]

i really like the first line

[kshtoinks12]

i really like the first line
and i like the rest too, haha
good job

[marbury1414]

and i like the rest too, haha
good job

Haha, thanks.

[wyverna]

I like it

[marbury1414]

I like it

Thanks. :)

[OveriseFan]

Eh, the meter in the chorus staggers too much for my liking. Some of it is really good, but there are parts you need to fix up so they flow better, like the end of the chorus.

[OveriseFan]

She’s dreaming illusion, she’s dreaming in fantasy

I really dig that line though.

[marbury1414]

Eh, the meter in the chorus staggers too much for my liking. Some of it is really good, but there are parts you need to fix up so they flow better, like the end of the chorus.

Haha, well it's an old song so there's no use in changing it. But thanks for reading it.

[xllirikx]

I stopped reading after the line Coney Island.

Too much like DFCF, and they are a religion to me.

[sweetforever]

I like it. you write better lyrics then I do:[

[marbury1414]

I stopped reading after the line Coney Island.

Too much like DFCF, and they are a religion to me.

Haha, too much like Death Cab? I didn't know they used that location in a song.

[marbury1414]

I like it. you write better lyrics then I do:[

Thanks.

[OveriseFan]

I stopped reading after the line Coney Island.

Too much like DFCF, and they are a religion to me.

Yeah, because everyone that lives near there in NY hasn't been to Coney Island?

Come on, it's like a fucking national landmark.

[tiny222]

Aww, Danny, thanks for sharing. I love it.

She says she feels more like delusion
Trying too hard at killing time
^ I like that a lot.

[marbury1414]

Aww, Danny, thanks for sharing. I love it.

She says she feels more like delusion
Trying too hard at killing time
^ I like that a lot.

:D

[Boring Pop Song]

Eh, the meter in the chorus staggers too much for my liking. Some of it is really good, but there are parts you need to fix up so they flow better, like the end of the chorus.


james, why are you always worried about meter...? poems and songs do not need meter, sometimes they lose something genuine when you force things into a meter.


i like this a lot

[marbury1414]

james, why are you always worried about meter...? poems and songs do not need meter, sometimes they lose something genuine when you force things into a meter.


i like this a lot

Thanks man.

[Boring Pop Song]

Thanks man.

now post in mine bitch tits

[crit]

She’s dreaming illusion, she’s dreaming in fantasy

I really dig that line though.

me too