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ArTkY_
04/08/06, 09:05 PM
This isn't completely finished, but its the overall jist of the song. This is my first thing in a while... The verses alternate between ETID (GP era) style screams and singing.

Ladies and gentlemen!
What you're about to see here
May frighten and disturb you
I suggest you leave the building
have you no sense at all?

I'll be your host on this journey
to what may not seem reality
just what are you so afraid of?
this is our city, just chewed up
and spit out

Ladies and gentlemen!
I'd like you to meet
the guest of honor!
We've got a hell of a show for you tonight
Enjoy getting fat off of lies

This one claims to know
the secrets of life
but is blinded by his own false ambition
yet you eat it up
and another one wins
as the whole town spills its guts

Ladies and gentlemen!
We've saved the best for last!
You may think they lack class!
But c'mon, you know better than that!

Let's face it
they say they're from Chicago
But their hearts are in L.A.
they say they're from Chicago
But their hearts are in L.A.
Its your classic case of betrayal

Ya know...
I'm thinking of selling my soul to the devil too.

Fin.

Meh, its not very good. But it seemed a good idea at the time, haha.
OveriseFan
04/09/06, 08:17 AM
Is this about Fall Out Boy?

I hope not.

But it sure seems like it.

It needs some work, and I think the "Ladies and Gentlemen" bits got kinda corny. But if done well, it could work.
ArTkY_
04/09/06, 08:54 AM
Is this about Fall Out Boy?

I hope not.

But it sure seems like it.

It needs some work, and I think the "Ladies and Gentlemen" bits got kinda corny. But if done well, it could work.
Only the last verse. haha

Don't hate.

Its supposed to be corny, its not really supposed to be that good of a song. I wrote it for the sake of writing.
OveriseFan
04/09/06, 09:09 AM
Only the last verse. haha

Don't hate.

Its supposed to be corny, its not really supposed to be that good of a song. I wrote it for the sake of writing.

That's what made me think it.

Wow...

I'm hating.

This sucks.

Die.
ArTkY_
04/09/06, 09:15 AM
That's what made me think it.

Wow...

I'm hating.

This sucks.

Die.
Ouch.
xglassjawx
04/09/06, 09:57 AM
Corny lyrics own though hahaha.
ArTkY_
04/09/06, 10:10 AM
Well duh. This is the worst thing I've ever written though, haha.
xglassjawx
04/09/06, 11:04 AM
Well duh. This is the worst thing I've ever written though, haha.

Hahaha.
wyverna
04/09/06, 11:36 AM
This really reminds me of a Panic! song.
ArTkY_
04/09/06, 11:43 AM
This really reminds me of a Panic! song.
Ick. I'm gonna take that as a negative comment. Entirely expected though.
Hilikus
04/09/06, 04:47 PM
Its supposed to be corny, its not really supposed to be that good of a song. I wrote it for the sake of writing.

- "The Ladies And Gentlemen" part is a bit cliche.

- I actually like the Chicago LA part quite a bit.

- I could totally see this as an ETID song, so if thats what you were going for then good job.

- Maybe these lyrics are corny. But so are ETID's lyrics. They are all very toungue in cheek.
ex. (Hey girls, I'm a cunt!)


- This isn't that bad.
ArTkY_
04/09/06, 04:50 PM
- "The Ladies And Gentlemen" part is a bit cliche.

- I actually like the Chicago LA part quite a bit.

- I could totally see this as an ETID song, so if thats what you were going for then good job.

- Maybe these lyrics are corny. But so are ETID's lyrics. They are all very toungue in cheek.
ex. (Hey girls, I'm a cunt!)


- This isn't that bad.
Well you got what I was going for. I was just trying something different, but apparently people will praise ETID for writing songs like this but will rip someone for it.

This is probably one of the worst written songs I've every done though.
a speedo model
04/10/06, 09:25 AM
yeah, it's not your best.
SockMonkeyRiot
04/10/06, 11:00 PM
I like it, but you have written better.