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iHATEapril
04/13/06, 11:34 AM
Our bodies, the vessel of our love
Blessed by only the ability to fuck
Don't be embarrassed, that's what they're for
You just keep thinking that's what they're for
Our hearts the messenger to our bodies
Tear her apart, Be torn apart
Anything in the hopes of love
In the hope we'll one day be done

So beautiful, oh so beautiful at heart
The words drip out to paper
But I can't believe in them
I certainly cannot believe in her
The liar and the cheater
A match made in heaven
There is no beauty in us
And our hearts? Our hearts are wasted.

Hold me down, You always did love to hold me
This is almost the same, only this time I'm screaming
In telling me you loved me, you signed over yourself
In saying maybe, I signed myself in to hell
We escape our sins and forget about our souls
I never had morals, and yours were easily sold
I bet you think you're saving me from failure and my dreams
But you're efforts leave us damned, that's just how this seems

As you reach the point where your body gives out
I reach the point where my vision breaks down
I see only your face, a sight to which I'm ashamed
I feel only your body, as mine goes so lame
I die more inside with each passing second
And with that my limbs fall onto her bed
In the moment, time's suspended
In this moment, I'm dead

You're God best let me into heaven,
Or every word youve said has been a lie
a speedo model
04/13/06, 02:57 PM
i like it.
SLADE775
04/13/06, 03:09 PM
So, do you actually think that this is good?
iHATEapril
04/13/06, 04:24 PM
So, do you actually think that this is good?

You're always so negative towards everyone you're not best friends with. If you don't like it, give suggestions. I was polite to you, you should be polite in return.
SLADE775
04/13/06, 04:29 PM
You're always so negative towards everyone you're not best friends with. If you don't like it, give suggestions. I was polite to you, you should be polite in return.

I'm being nothing but polite here.

I really want to know if you think that this is good or not.
iHATEapril
04/13/06, 04:33 PM
I'm being nothing but polite here.

I really want to know if you think that this is good or not.

So you weren't being sarcastic? I guess you fooled me. Yeah, I thought it was good enough to post and get another audience's opinion.
ArTkY_
04/14/06, 09:47 AM
Blessed by only the ability to fuck

You didn't need that line. The rest of it is fine.
iHATEapril
04/14/06, 09:48 AM
Blessed by only the ability to fuck

You didn't need that line. The rest of it is fine.

Thank you kindly.
OveriseFan
03/06/07, 07:21 PM
Teehee Mike's queer.
iHATEapril
03/06/07, 07:24 PM
i hate you.
iHATEapril
03/06/07, 07:26 PM
oh my god that is so awful
OveriseFan
03/06/07, 07:32 PM
I thought you'd like a blast from the past.

I love you.

(Bump one of my really old, awful pieces. It's fun for a good laugh.)

P.S. If you do, I'll just delete the thread. Unless it's amazing, which knowing me, it is.
iHATEapril
03/06/07, 07:34 PM
hahah youre such a dork, this is probably my worst one, I wrote it when I was so into Norma Jean.
OveriseFan
03/06/07, 07:36 PM
I couldn't post one of your good old ones, could I?

P.S. Why am I such a pussy when it comes to girls?
iHATEapril
03/06/07, 07:39 PM
In reference to acrostic girl? Who knows, Im immune to girls right now, I'm just psyched to be grinding up on a beauty at prom. What happened now?
OveriseFan
03/06/07, 07:59 PM
In reference to acrostic girl? Who knows, Im immune to girls right now, I'm just psyched to be grinding up on a beauty at prom. What happened now?

I'm just a pussy. haha.

Like, I'm terrified to call her out on it or whatever.
RomeoAGoGo
03/06/07, 08:05 PM
You shouldn't have included the "i'm really sorry if this sucks blah blah blah" title shit. That just made me not want to read it. If it sucks we'll be the ones to decide, don't try and preface it and assume we're gonna rip it to pieces. That's just stupid.

As for the poem it's nothing special or different. You need to add some more originality to your work. That's just my two lincoln's.
iHATEapril
03/07/07, 08:37 AM
You shouldn't have included the "i'm really sorry if this sucks blah blah blah" title shit. That just made me not want to read it. If it sucks we'll be the ones to decide, don't try and preface it and assume we're gonna rip it to pieces. That's just stupid.

As for the poem it's nothing special or different. You need to add some more originality to your work. That's just my two lincoln's.

Check the date.
iHATEapril
03/07/07, 08:37 AM
I'm just a pussy. haha.

Like, I'm terrified to call her out on it or whatever.

Why don't you let me do it, god, my prom date is so hot.