the closest thing to a love poem that I will ever write

[MinionOfBoredom]

i.
I suppose that I shall try to keep the raindrops
away from your feet every now and then,
but lying through my fingernails is no forte of mine.
I make no promise to synchronize my smiles
to the flutter of your breath's scarlet butterflies
but for you, my own would materialize
into the quivering mist of a million dreaming hummingbirds
and carry you along the fraying edge of the nearest storm cloud.

ii.
I wish, therefore I am
but I dream, so I'm
the sand and summer of yours.
You are hidden by the nightingales
idling in my sky, and all I have
to know your cadence
is a ribbon of footprints
laced across my cheek.

iii.
I am just as mercurial as any other of the sheep in your hair
grazing on the hazel pasture of thought and semblance
but I can smirk and mean it.

I have been undercut by the more eclectic of your sparrows
who have no doubt flown from greater heights and greener cityscapes
but I have sunbathed in vespers for far longer.

I shall heed your allure as much as the next eager hawk
feasting on the angels astray on your laughter
but at least I'm fascinated by your smile.

[MinionOfBoredom]

I think I'm done with this one, now.

[tommy's ghost]

Ending was egh, and the synchronizing heart bit was contrived. I really liked the rest, though.

[MinionOfBoredom]

Ending was egh, and the synchronizing heart bit was contrived. I really liked the rest, though.

Yeah, I definitely think I can end it better. I just wanted to get something out there for the time being, haha.

About the "synchronizing" bit...yeah, I'll get to fixing it. I see what you mean, and agree.

[tommy's ghost]

Yeah, I definitely think I can end it better. I just wanted to get something out there for the time being, haha.

About the "synchronizing" bit...yeah, I'll get to fixing it. I see what you mean, and agree.

Haha. Say no to filler.

[MinionOfBoredom]

What I'm trying to get across in the last stanza is basically, "you're hot, but I see you for more than that" and in the 'synchronizing' bit, "I'm not gonna bother with overstating silly commitments."

...just more poetically than that, of course. I'm having a bit of trouble with the former, without introducing cliches like "beauty" or "radiance" since love is such a hotly covered topic in poetry.