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zack-182
08/30/09, 06:02 PM
This is a story of a husband and wife. The wife gets cancer from persistent drug use and addiction then dies.

Intro
I consider cancer a thief; I miss your tracked veins lying next to me
By the end, I could barely see your eyes; they were covered by starry images inside
If you weren’t lighting up your headaches were nowhere near fine
The cringe of the filter and its last puff were always the first things on your mind
The fine print on the label was the first warning
My last memories from the hospital are your monitors, tick, tock, going

Verse
I don’t believe in fairy tales; I don’t believe you’re better off
All those pretty pills you found, were they easier coming up or down?
Ever since your last breath, I never touched another cigarette
The black they stained on my lungs, traveled right down to the bottom of my heart
God made sin so we might know his mercy; I can still feel you battling inside me

Chorus
I should have known that things never go as planned
But I can’t help feeling like God’s an extortionist
And took you away when we couldn’t meet his demands
And even though up on the silver screen they play
You can’t wrap your arms around those memories
Because everything you love eventually fades away

Verse 2
What you steal will never mean half as much as what you own
So why bother taking her frail remains at only 26 years old
Were her lungs that bad, was her heart that dark
Was your mighty staff that hungry for some form of punishment?
Or did your large eyes blink too fast,
Does it not matter to you that she’ll never hear her daughter’s first laugh?

Bridge
I could’ve sworn you had circles of powder forming around your eyes
You were high for weeks at a time
And you begged and begged for me to give you mine
But I couldn’t watch you do more lines
I just couldn’t watch you do more lines
You were doing lines all the time

Chorus
I should have known that things never go as planned
But I can’t help feeling like God’s an extortionist
And took you away when we couldn’t meet his demands
And even though up on the silver screen they play
You can’t wrap your arms around those memories
Because everything you love eventually fades away

Outro
The doctors were drawing straws
Pleading to each other that the other deserved to tell me more
But letting go is so much easier when you have some sign of hope
And even though up on the silver screen they play
You can’t wrap your arms around those memories
Because everything you love eventually fades away

xidreamofyou32x
08/30/09, 08:27 PM
Interesting concept. I really like the chorus.

zack-182
08/30/09, 10:04 PM
Interesting concept. I really like the chorus.

thank you

TK
08/30/09, 10:06 PM
I liked the style of this. I think I'll critique this sometime later this week and that will be my last post in this shitty forum.

zack-182
08/31/09, 12:19 AM
I liked the style of this. I think I'll critique this sometime later this week and that will be my last post in this shitty forum.

thatd be great thank you

zack-182
09/01/09, 09:37 AM
anyone else? =]

BlackHeartBook
03/22/10, 04:42 PM
Oh my gosh that was mind blowing do u right 4 a band or something?

zack-182
03/29/10, 09:37 AM
Oh my gosh that was mind blowing do u right 4 a band or something?

im not sure if this is sarcastic or not..haha

Matt Chylak
03/29/10, 08:06 PM
Interesting concept. I really like the chorus.

it was interesting when brand new did it. see: "guernica"
not exactly the same but come on...the way a toy feels? really?

i do like this though...the imagery is nicely done

BlackHeartBook
03/31/10, 05:39 AM
Dnt worry my comment wasnt sarcastic at all lol

Triqii101
04/05/10, 10:37 AM
This is great. It's different. But different is good :D

Slip-kid
03/01/11, 06:57 PM
this is the peanutbutter to the jelly of my soul