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OveriseFan
04/20/06, 06:20 PM
I need to start writing prose again...

We dangled with hope to the American Dream,
Posing like mannequins in bedroom windows.
Things aren't as simpled as they once seemed,
I think in this setting it especially shows.

We kept staring at unchanging screens,
Watching the scene, waiting for good news,
Things aren't as simpled as they once seemed,
But when did we cave into that excuse?

Well let's awake to the sound of AM radio...
Let's awake and see how far we can, go, oh...

We stood at the door with our shoes laced.
Hoping for the rain to clear up soon.
Our steady standing, turned into a pace,
As we wasted away our afternoon.

Well let's awake to the sound of AM radio...
Let's awake and see how far we can, go, oh...

The iris rolls it's eyes as we all wait for it to bloom.
The letters never read right if they're not scented with perfume.
I promise I'll wait for your next phone call so uneasily.
As long as it's soundtrack is the sound of AM radio...

Well let's awake to the sound of AM radio...
Let's awake and see how far we can, go, oh...
cris545
04/20/06, 09:20 PM
James, you make me regret neglecting this thread, even if it was for a little while. I'm here to stay now. I absolutely love this, great job. :)
ArTkY_
04/21/06, 06:25 AM
Holy shit. I had this title in mind for something I wrote about the American dream.
OveriseFan
04/21/06, 12:52 PM
Holy shit. I had this title in mind for something I wrote about the American dream.

Eh, take it.

I just need a title for this.
OveriseFan
04/21/06, 12:53 PM
James, you make me regret neglecting this thread, even if it was for a little while. I'm here to stay now. I absolutely love this, great job. :)

Haha, thank you very much.

<3
djUbilla
04/21/06, 12:58 PM
I like it a lot. The imagery of the scented letter was great, and the simple repeated lines of the AM Radio part were perfect for your theme. The one thing I didn't like was the title. Great job, though.
OveriseFan
04/21/06, 02:10 PM
I like it a lot. The imagery of the scented letter was great, and the simple repeated lines of the AM Radio part were perfect for your theme. The one thing I didn't like was the title. Great job, though.

Yeah, I needed something, and I had that title stored away.

It doesn't really fit with the song though, so I'll think up something soon probably.
ArTkY_
04/21/06, 03:33 PM
Eh, take it.

I just need a title for this.
Nah, I had other titles in mind.

I read The Great Gatsby for the third time so I felt it was finally time to write a song based on it.

This is really good prose. Sorry I didn't critique it before. Good imagery.
OveriseFan
04/22/06, 12:47 PM
This isn't prose...

I said I needed to start writing prose again.