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[pr0digy]

I'm very critical on myself, so I have a hard time judging the value of anything I write. Any opinions, positive or negative are appreciated.


Such a cause for inspiration
He swiftly ponders this situation
Death is coming, knocking, wanting
Marching to the drums of a heart, scared and haunted

The story is nearing the swift conclusion
Bloody fireworks, create elegant confusion
Murderous screams, sing desperate illusions
Warm smiles, of a dying delusion

Dark grey clouds, towering wind
No light near, only darkness and sin
The deed is done, a life slowly fades
An innocent death, impending, not in vein

The worst is over, the pain is easing
A sense of joy, immense pleasing
A life well lived, with one final phrase;


"Your knife through my heart, here I die,
Don't be alarmed, please don't cry
Everything drifting away, my end is near
I loved you forever, my forever is here."

[reesa]

i love it (:

especially these bits...

Murderous screams, sing desperate illusions
Warm smiles, of a dying delusion

"Your knife through my heart, here I die,
Don't be alarmed, please don't cry
Everything drifting away, my end is near
I loved you forever, my forever is here."

i thought it was really dark but how you wrote it makes it good (:

[pr0digy]

thanks, it actually means a lot. i've taken some time off writing the past 6 months or so, but was considering it again, if some of the things i had already written were well received.