Memories Play the Genius

[iHATEapril]

I have an issue with being alone and I feel more so now than in a while. Comments/Suggestions please.

And I hope you don't come home
with a tale of all new drugs
Because the person I care for
is not chemically in love
And I know how it must feel
To be told it's your last chance
But remember this is the deal
And From here it's in your hands

Your reaction to my mentioning
My fear of all your actions
Shows your lack of understanding
And your slight sense of distraction
Of how I could say it's over
If you make just one mistake
If you could just stay sober
I might promise to do the same

I can feel her take the first drag
And her inhibitions fade
My trust in her's decreasing
and I'm growing afraid
Of how the light plays tricks on her
While shes exposed to substance
How right and wrong's unsure
When you might be under the influence

Who am I to judge?
An addict versus a lush
You're in it for the thrill
I'm in it for dying young

[ArTkY_]

Sounds too angsty for what you're saying. I don't really know how to describe that. Its pretty good, but it needs to be patched up and somethings could be said better.

[iHATEapril]

Sounds too angsty for what you're saying. I don't really know how to describe that. Its pretty good, but it needs to be patched up and somethings could be said better.

Thanks, I'm currently finish up writing out the music for it and will probably record it in the coming week.

[a speedo model]

i enjoyed it alot, especially the last line "i'm in it for dying young". towards the end it does get a little weak, but overall it is very good. good job, man.