please critisze these lyrics, i play it on the guitar so any help would be nice.

[AllEnds]

long night drives to no where,
holding you in my great care.
when did making love lose its fcking meaning?

ain't love grand?
now your not even here to hold my hand.
you took this knife,
to the center of my life.

these days mean nothing without you,
i try so hard to get you out of thought.
never in my life did i want to find,
a love so real.. a love so fake.
liars who lie about love don't deserve this love

ain't love grand?
now your not even here to hold my hand.
please tell me hun,
why did you make me run?

do you remember how it was? when i was
between your legs?
When my face was
buried below your waist.
just like the weather...
i can still taste your pleasure.

ain't love grand,
now your not even here to hold my hand.
oh god, take me, oh god...

[jeff crawford]

honestly the only verse i liked was the second one....
its a good lyrics but there sooo much more you could do with it, for instance i liked the beginning it caught my attention
its alright, you just need to put more thought to it

[Dymytry Vance]

Don't quote atreyu for starters