The Exchange of Modern Currency

[iHATEapril]

Take the look of horror
Melt it off your face
Coin it into currency
that changes from state to state
We'll buy your body
With your face
I'm protecting you
You'll never see it that way

This is a fad, or so I'm told
If I look at it that way
I guess I'm sold
You aren't worth half as much
As skin and bones
I guess you're sold

Love is an art
You paint us beautifully
It's up to me
To show us realistically

You're streaks of color
On a canvas of black
The painting's lovelier
If you fade to the back

[a speedo model]

i'm not sure about this one. it's okay, not your best but it's good. i don't know, nothing real stood out to me. keep it up, though.

[iHATEapril]

i'm not sure about this one. it's okay, not your best but it's good. i don't know, nothing real stood out to me. keep it up, though.

Eh, I dunno. I like it, but maybe it's just because it's near and dear to me.

[a speedo model]

Eh, I dunno. I like it, but maybe it's just because it's near and dear to me.

like i said it is good and there's nothing i dislike about it, in particular. something just didn't click.

[ArTkY_]

I agree with the dude above me.

I still don't know your name, man.

[iHATEapril]

I agree with the dude above me.

I still don't know your name, man.

I'm Mike, or do you mean speedo, because I don't know his name either.

[to kill this]

idk, i mean it's pretty good. but it's not your best. and believe me, i've seen a lot of you. and i know that you're better than that.

[ArTkY_]

I'm Mike, or do you mean speedo, because I don't know his name either.
I know you're Mike. I mean speedo.

[OveriseFan]

Mike, eh?

[iHATEapril]

Mike, eh?

hmm?

[SardonicOwnsMe]

I like this idea, a lot. I think you could truly take it places. My only suggestion would be to truly expand on the title and the idea of human worth (I think thats what you're getting at).


Take the look of horror
Melt it off your face
Coin it into currency
that changes from state to state
We'll buy your body
With your face
I'm protecting you
You'll never see it that way

That stanza is flawless. The imagery is fabulous.

Great job. I like good poetry.

[iHATEapril]

I like this idea, a lot. I think you could truly take it places. My only suggestion would be to truly expand on the title and the idea of human worth (I think thats what you're getting at).


Take the look of horror
Melt it off your face
Coin it into currency
that changes from state to state
We'll buy your body
With your face
I'm protecting you
You'll never see it that way

That stanza is flawless. The imagery is fabulous.

Great job. I like good poetry.

Thank you very much.

[a speedo model]

I agree with the dude above me.

I still don't know your name, man.

my name's josiah.

[ArTkY_]

my name's josiah.
:O

You can join the weird names club with me and Anton!

[a speedo model]

:O

You can join the weird names club with me and Anton!

hahaha, yeah, it's not a common name.

[wyverna]

Josiah is a cool name. I'm impressed.

And this is a good piece, but compared to your others, I think you can do better :)

[a speedo model]

Josiah is a cool name. I'm impressed.

thank you, i've always liked it. and i don't think i ever caught your name....

[wyverna]

thank you, i've always liked it. and i don't think i ever caught your name....

My name's Grace. It's not as cool as Josiah but it'll do.

[a speedo model]

My name's Grace. It's not as cool as Josiah but it'll do.

Grace is a very pretty name.