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THISWARISOURS.
10/17/09, 01:28 PM
this is only a rough draft, i'll probably change some words..but whaddya think!?


Blessed By A Broken Dream

Intro:
I, can not help myself can, you help complete me.
I, can not complete myself, can you please help me.

I, cannot live.
I, cannot live.
I, cannot live.
Without you.

Verse 1:
Blessed by a broken dream, and thou heart shall desire.
Loneliness is killing me, trapped in like barbed-wire.

I don’t think I can live like this, oh can you take me now?
Without you I can not exist, my heart will not allow.

Bridge:
Oh how I wish, that I could live, just one more day with you.
You can’t begin, to comprehend, just how much I love you. (No)

Oh how I wished, I could have spent, just one more day with you.
You can’t begin, to comprehend, just how much I loved you.

Chorus:
I, can not help myself can, you help complete me.
I, can not complete myself, can you please help me.

I, cannot live.
I, cannot live.
I, cannot live.
Without you.

Verse 2:
Shattered dreams will end my life,
This is where I stand tonight.

Above a broken, bloody, sword.
My soul, departs, to the Lord.

Shattered dreams will end my life,
This is where I stand tonight.

Above a broken, bloody, sword.
My soul, departs, to the Lord.

Bridge:
Oh how I wish, that I could live, just one more day with you.
You can’t begin, to comprehend, just how much I love you. (No)

Oh how I wished, I could have spent, just one more day with you.
You can’t begin, to comprehend, just how much I loved you.

Chorus:
I, can not help myself can, you help complete me.
I, can not complete myself, can you please help me.

Breakdown:
You drove me here, as I had feared, your cold hands made me disappear.
How long, could I, have lived like this, all that made me, was a tear.

But now I have, transgressed beyond, your piercing eyes, a bloody pond.
But now I have, transgressed beyond, your piercing eyes, your piercing eyes.

Outro:
YOU
DID
THIS
TO ME

YOU
DID
THIS
TO ME

YOU
DID
THIS
TO ME

A bloody, pond…

A BLOODY POND.

unit254
10/17/09, 02:31 PM
Very vivid. 456 thumbs up.

heart4aTongue
10/23/09, 08:36 PM
I do believe I just fell in love. Beautiful.

Idealist80
11/12/09, 12:26 AM
this is only a rough draft, i'll probably change some words..but whaddya think!?


Blessed By A Broken Dream

Intro:
I, can not help myself can, you help complete me.
I, can not complete myself, can you please help me.

I, cannot live.
I, cannot live.
I, cannot live.
Without you.

Verse 1:
Blessed by a broken dream, and thou heart shall desire.
Loneliness is killing me, trapped in like barbed-wire.

I don’t think I can live like this, oh can you take me now?
Without you I can not exist, my heart will not allow.

Bridge:
Oh how I wish, that I could live, just one more day with you.
You can’t begin, to comprehend, just how much I love you. (No)

Oh how I wished, I could have spent, just one more day with you.
You can’t begin, to comprehend, just how much I loved you.

Chorus:
I, can not help myself can, you help complete me.
I, can not complete myself, can you please help me.

I, cannot live.
I, cannot live.
I, cannot live.
Without you.

Verse 2:
Shattered dreams will end my life,
This is where I stand tonight.

Above a broken, bloody, sword.
My soul, departs, to the Lord.

Shattered dreams will end my life,
This is where I stand tonight.

Above a broken, bloody, sword.
My soul, departs, to the Lord.

Bridge:
Oh how I wish, that I could live, just one more day with you.
You can’t begin, to comprehend, just how much I love you. (No)

Oh how I wished, I could have spent, just one more day with you.
You can’t begin, to comprehend, just how much I loved you.

Chorus:
I, can not help myself can, you help complete me.
I, can not complete myself, can you please help me.

Breakdown:
You drove me here, as I had feared, your cold hands made me disappear.
How long, could I, have lived like this, all that made me, was a tear.

But now I have, transgressed beyond, your piercing eyes, a bloody pond.
But now I have, transgressed beyond, your piercing eyes, your piercing eyes.

Outro:
YOU
DID
THIS
TO ME

YOU
DID
THIS
TO ME

YOU
DID
THIS
TO ME

A bloody, pond…

A BLOODY POND.


not bad.. im guessing this is hardcore or screamo considering there is a breakdown... i love breakdowns so if this is actually a song of your's id love to hear it.

GhostMachine
11/12/09, 03:11 PM
This is horrible.

Jake Denning
11/12/09, 04:32 PM
Awful attempt, awful username.

Idealist80
11/12/09, 07:06 PM
Awful attempt, awful username.

This isn't even bad, I don't get why there are so many unecessarily judgemental douchebags on this website... do you just get off on talking shit or you just enjoy being a miserable tool?

flks511
11/12/09, 07:44 PM
This isn't even bad, I don't get why there are so many unecessarily judgemental douchebags on this website... do you just get off on talking shit or you just enjoy being a miserable tool?
Most AP users are intelligent people who actually rate music objectively. Not douchebags. But I do actually like these lyrics, especially to the breakdown. Judging by your username, and the song structure, it doesn't sound like something I'd listen to, but I do think the lyrics are decent.

Idealist80
11/12/09, 07:48 PM
Most AP users are intelligent people who actually rate music objectively. Not douchebags. But I do actually like these lyrics, especially to the breakdown. Judging by your username, and the song structure, it doesn't sound like something I'd listen to, but I do think the lyrics are decent.


objectively.... haha right... you can be objective without using words like: horrible attempt awful name etc etc

flks511
11/12/09, 07:50 PM
objectively.... haha right... you can be objective without using words like: horrible attempt awful name etc etc
You can. But if you do, it doesn't make you a douchebag, it just means you feel strongly about the lyrics and use strong language to communicate that you feel that way.

EndHasAStart
11/19/09, 02:40 AM
Reminds me of this so much. So this is my objective criticism.

Fkko-3N_iOM

wholeofheart
02/05/10, 10:36 PM
like

Blackend_Tearz
02/06/10, 07:12 PM
Very good not bening a critice but instead of writing "You did this to me" 3 times y dont you just write "You did this to me X3"