Christmas

[JimGray]

I am proud to be a leper
I will always bare my bones
if you bare with me
and hold me gently

If you have all your skin remaining
My ghost will gladly walk you home
if you walk quietly
along these barren streets

And we'll use the constellations
as our tour guide.
Shed all of our clothes,
and shed all of our pride.
Dip into the ocean
where there's nothing more alive
than your teeth brushing softly against my lips.

Wrap ourselves in blankets
let the pulse swallow us whole
as we don't have a prayer
under this winter air.

And when they find both of our bodies
buried gently under snow
naked as the trees that brought us in.

And we'll use our blessed Jesus as a tour guide
and fall asleep uttering empty prayers
and one last invitation to forever
as we give into temptation of winter's air.

And we'll use the constellations as a tour guide.
shed all of our clothes
and shed all of our pride.
dip into the ocean,
where there's nothing more alive
then our heartbeats waning softly against our bones.

Than the solution to how we'll never be alone.


Note: I am a bit rusty =D

[GhostMachine]

Jim...it's been a hell of a long time. How are things man?

I enjoyed the piece. The rhythm is broken of the piece is broken in certain points. Overall, it's a really good piece though.

[JimGray]

Hey, thanks a ton man! Umm, I am not bad, just getting settled into a new place etc. You?

[matt_rawlings]

Alot of these ideas and sentiments seem familiar, but they are tied together in a nice manner. I'd try and aim for less common ideas when trying to express what you're tyring to say here. Once you start doing that, then it will florish.

The caring is obviously there, it just needs that extra push

[GhostMachine]

Hey, thanks a ton man! Umm, I am not bad, just getting settled into a new place etc. You?

I'm doing pretty decently...trying to not get fired from my job for the most part.

[a speedo model]

I agree with Matt, liked the sentiment and could relate to several portions but it felt very familiar at times. Push for a bit more originality in the execution of the ideas, perhaps? Not necessarily change the thought but the wording?

Good to see you in here, man.