just a little something i wrote..

[scream.yor<3out]

well i wrote this a while ago because i had this boyfriend right...an he was kind of an @$$. i mean, we went out 5 times...and put it this way...i never broke up with him.

wrapped in the tangles of a lonely beating heart
i sit back as my world falls apart.
i'm glued to the spot, my legs fail to rise
as salty tears stream from the depths of my eyes.
you promised me once, you promised me twice
promise once more, a kiss will suffice.

i dont know. jut came out of my @$$.

[OveriseFan]

How about not using retarded fonts, and spelling out "Ass" rather than that crazy thing you're doing.

This is not very good, but surprisingly decent for a n00b to writing(I assume so anyway)

Yeah, just way too boring for me, nothing I haven't heard before. The ending was kind of clever though...

But the rhyming in the first two couplets isn't good.

[a speedo model]

it's not very good but it shows promise, keep working on it.