My Bodies Overflow

[Deadbolt23]

Stem the flow, dear.
I'm afraid I can't help you here.
You should know by now.
But, I can't help you hear.

Bar the leak, love.
Array the stack to alter
I should've noticed by now
that you've become my altar

And outside, clouds collide
and take shape

So thickly, snow is falling
And yet, sickly I'm still calling out
One day.

Ford the lake, while
While this body overflows.
If I could fly, I'd be blown
To wherever the clover blows

And outside, clouds collide
and take shape

So thickly, snow is falling
And yet, sickly I'm still calling out
One day. My God, that I may be welcome again.
(My band is barred, and my bard is banned from this house)


I'd be interested to hear anyone's interpretations on what this song means. I think it's more cryptic than my others I've posted. (It'll be easier to understand if you have read my others, as I often use the same metaphors.)

[Dead Poet]

Forge the lake, while
While this body overflows.


I think you should remove the first while, it kills the flow.


Array the stack to alter
I should've noticed by now
that you've become my altar


Really like thse lines.



(My band is barred, and my bard is banned from this house)


This seemed a bit out of place to me, maybe it's because I don't understand.

Overall, I think it's a really good piece.

[La La Lie]

Stem the flow, dear.
I'm afraid I can't help you here.
You should know by now.
But, I can't help you hear.

I love these lines.


Ford the lake, while
While this body overflows.
If I could fly, I'd be blown
To wherever the clover blows

I also agree that the double 'while' distracts from the flow, the first one could probably be dismissed.
But overall, I really like it.
Keep posting :)

[Deadbolt23]

Does anyone have any thoughts one what it might mean?

[jeff crawford]

Sucks