how bout an angry song?

[tdunks523]

i never see any angry or violent songs on this so i figured why not post one to change things up. i like writing random ideas that pop into my head and try making lyrics out of them. and this one i think is okay but if anyone wants to tell me its good than thats cool and if it sucks tell me how to fix it lol.

Never Trust Anything Buried Only 6 feet Below You

i bet i am the last person you thought you'd see
you fucking thought you could kill me
now you have a problem you didn't expect baby
the fact that i am a fucking zombie

and now i have you
have you all alone
no one could ever hear you scream
i dug myself right out of the ground
and your dead body is tonights theme

i will tear you limb from fucking limb

no, i will not tie you up
i love the fight that your putting up
but this is not enough
i will make you suffer, make you fucking suffer
i love that you will soon be mutilated
pieces of you are flying everywhere
the sound of bones breaking is getting me up
your right
i love being this sadistic
this is my way of playing god and i think i'm winning
there's nothing anyone can do to stop me

your flesh is now all over the floor
i don't think you can bleed anymore
i;ve torn you up so much my arms are soar

i'm just about done with you
cause there's really nothing left of you
just one more thing i gotta do
eat your fucking brains

who would have thought the best night of my life would happen when i wasn't even alive
tonight i satisfied the thirst for blood
you fucking got what was coming to you
for hours i made you wish you were dead
now that i've done my work i shal return to the soil
but only for now

[GhostMachine]

This is shit.

[mulcahy67]

i have to agree. its pretty bad. it just sounds like a daddy-issued teenager who just got cheated on and attempted poetry for the first time after listening to way too much Slipknot.

[DanPiazza]

i don't wanna be rude, but this is not really any good.

[tdunks523]

i have to agree. its pretty bad. it just sounds like a daddy-issued teenager who just got cheated on and attempted poetry for the first time after listening to way too much Slipknot.
its funny cause i get along great with my dad never been cheated on but i do listen to old school slipknot so i guess thats why its bad lol

[HoldThatSound]

"the fact that i am a fucking zombie"


i literally lol'd at that/ sorry

[mulcahy67]

its funny cause i get along great with my dad never been cheated on but i do listen to old school slipknot so i guess thats why its bad lol

that explains it even better, to be honest. most of this is just forced. you just have a bunch of scattershot angry lines with "fucking" thrown into them all jumbled around to really just put across an absolutely silly message.

angry songs can work, but youre not really expressing it in a very interesting way. this is too much fred durst, not enough james maynard.

[jeff crawford]

Fucking Sucks

[GhostMachine]

that explains it even better, to be honest. most of this is just forced. you just have a bunch of scattershot angry lines with "fucking" thrown into them all jumbled around to really just put across an absolutely silly message.

angry songs can work, but youre not really expressing it in a very interesting way. this is too much fred durst, not enough james maynard.

No offense, but don't attempt to be like Maynard either. He's a complete fucking douche and everything he does sucks complete fucking ass.

[Matt Chylak]

after reading this, i felt like typing a disparaging remark, but then realized that everyone else already has already done it.
so you already know how i feel.

[tdunks523]

that explains it even better, to be honest. most of this is just forced. you just have a bunch of scattershot angry lines with "fucking" thrown into them all jumbled around to really just put across an absolutely silly message.

angry songs can work, but youre not really expressing it in a very interesting way. this is too much fred durst, not enough james maynard.

this is my first time ever writing anything and i honeslty knew ppl would bash it so its whatever but thanks for the advice