standing alone

[handguns4hearts]

Standing alone
In an ever-changing world
Blending in with the crowd
Yet trying to stand out
Clouds cover the sun
All the plants die
Buildings crumble
As the children cry

Standing alone
In the middle of it all
People just walk right past
Because I’m invisible
And nobody hears
As I cry out in pain
And yet everyone thinks
That I’m insane

[OveriseFan]

:shake:

Your rhyming's childish at best. This is just more self-loathing stupid shit, where you try and be clever but aren't. "Blending in with the crowd, yet trying to stand out" doesn't make much sense at all... Unless you meant a literal crowd, in which case I recommend using more literary techniques. I recommend that anyway but especially for the crowd.


P.S. It's "Scene"

[a speedo model]

james basically summed it up...

[wyverna]

It's a cliché idea, I'm afraid. Ditch the rhyming and try to write about something more original, that you want to write about, not that you think is cool, and you might do better next time.