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wyverna
06/23/06, 08:37 AM
The Dictionaries, They Have No Idea.

pain- noun: feeling caused by hurt to mind or body

hurt - verb: to cause pain or distress to

fear - noun: an unpleasant feeling caused by danger, evil, etc.

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being pulled deeper into a whirlpool of cynicism
it's not the answer but it's a workable solution
i know it's not right but desperation takes hold
i feel like someone is trying to drag my heart right out of my body
and it hurts oh God it hurts more than i ever thought possible
on the point of tears but too far gone for their crystal relief
hurtfearpaingriefhurtangerrageheart hurt hurt HURT
eyes squeezed tight shut, i won't let this show
make this go away someone anyone make it stop so help me
i will beg on my knees, lying prostrate writhing in agony
blame for the pain, oh God-
no shame, just this dead fear and all-consuming hurt that doesn't spare a part of me

TAKE ME NOW

OveriseFan
06/23/06, 12:46 PM
hurtfearpaingriefhurtangerrageheart hurt hurt HURT

I hate that.

The first part was alright in an OK Computer kind of way, but the Hurts just ruin it.

wyverna
06/23/06, 12:53 PM
hurtfearpaingriefhurtangerrageheart hurt hurt HURT

I hate that.

The first part was alright in an OK Computer kind of way, but the Hurts just ruin it.

alright, thanks :) I'll work on it.

I don't like this one much anyway, I just wanted some opinions.

a speedo model
06/24/06, 06:53 AM
yeah, this isn't as good as your others. it started off pretty good, but it just isn't memorable.