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headclub
07/03/06, 10:34 PM
ok, so i just started writing this ona pretty badass guitar riff i was working on...i'm still working on the 2nd verse and the bridge and outro...when i finish them i will repost on here...tell me if you like it...if you dont tell me what you dont like

Confusion

Waking up late on afternoons where days have passed and left you feeling so misunderstood
Waking up late, you realize your lifes a mess, your jobs a waste...
You're too spineless to fess up that everyone has left you
Wake up and smell the ashes of this city that you've grown so fond of
And memories they play apart in this cemetary where they bury the dead of this comatose community
They didn't realize what they were getting into when they signed their leases, paid off their mortgages...but hey, you lucked out

You forgot everything for one night of alcohol
You passed out for what seemed like day in a city
A city far from what you're used to
This is confusion

matt_rawlings
07/04/06, 05:35 AM
Sorry, but, nae

lfdfforever
07/04/06, 10:07 AM
keep writing and you will get better

SensesMike
07/05/06, 07:50 AM
comatose

i dont even know what that means. lol

|ant|
07/07/06, 04:35 PM
way way way too cliche...keep writing though...to become a better writer step out of your comfort zone.